How enjoyable. Very short, and somewhat robust, some dialog lines are easily confused with narrating. But, the idea is very good and the story brought smile to my face. Very good little piece, entertaining, full of childhood enthusiasm. Good work.

First Thursday Prompt for you? Welcome! Welcome to Poetigress' Thursday Prompt, hopefully you enjoy your time with the prompts, both writing and reading.

Hi panzergulo

Thanks for the comment, and for your welcome to the highly elite Thursday Prompt club.

Concerning the size and format, I'm afraid I had very little time to work on this piece; this is the best I could do in the time I had, and I'm glad you seem to like it regardless of these particular flaws.

Re the dialogue/narrating confusion possibilities: that is entirely deliberate. The whole piece is an internal monologue (possibly with some passages muttered aloud, or even spoken, depending on how the reader prefers it); you are directly witnessing the events going through the child’s mind.
I don't know if you've ever felt that way, but at times, when one is entirely focused on something - as children usually are when playing thusly - any interruption disrupts one’s thoughts so much that one somehow includes said interruption within one’s thoughts.
In short, you could say the yelling and speaking was not only physical – this is technically not the right term, but I hope you catch my drift – but also existed in the child's mind.

Finally, the ultimate confusion as to who said "I love you" is also meant to exist – for more or less the same reasons.

Hey, welcome to Thursday promts! Hopefully you will hang around.

There is lots of whimsy here! So much damn whimsy!

Short, but well written. I don't really have anything negative to say.

Hey AraElkins,

Thanks for the comment. Hang around is something I will most certainly do, although this week's story and the next will probably not be up to my usual standards.

Anyways, I went for quality over quantity (which I will also be doing this week and next week). It semed a safe to suppose that people prefer a short, decently-written sotry to a long, poorly-written one, especially here on the interwebs, where people rarely spend lots of time reading written artwork.

I know I would rather read something short and well written. Hell, if it's going to be poorly written, I would also prefer it to be short.

Most of the Thursday Prompts that people submit tend to be around 300-3000 words I would guess. Whatever you have time for.