More The huge lion whants more and its cute :)

Thanks. And yes, there'll be more.

Yes! You succumbed! :P
And such a great start :)

Bah, flatterer.

Nyah nyah nyah :P

that's cute. i always liked Andrew actually, i forgot he was your character.

good beginning for a self conclusive story XD

Actually, this is part 1 of 6. Each section, a different one of my guys takes centre-stage.

Very nice start there!

Thanks. I'm surprised people like it.

Pfffft. Yeah :P

I R Eddy-tah! I R gud! Heah meh RAWR!

Bugger, you were right, I uploaded the punctuation-less one. I'll fix it tomorrow.

Actually, I posted that before I discovered it was a bit munted. I emailed you a copy of the version with the track changes turned off so you can compare and fix up as you see fit.

All hail the mightey Eddy-tah! :O
:D

Okay, *now* you can hail me since the right version has gone up

What hailstone size would the mighty Eddy-tah prefer? :P

Hmm, they should be small so that the form a nice, slippery carpet over everything. It's fun watching people slip on the little fuckers

They should pack those in spray-cans... Somehow.

Isn't that what Cheez-whiz or whatever it's called in the US is for? I mean by all accounts you wouldn't want to actually EAT the stuff.

Wouldn't know, i'm not from US.
Though i vaguely remember seeing someone spray that into their mouth on TV and feeling nauseous.

Heh, I thought that some of the famous fake foods were well known all over the world, despite being US inventions

Yeah, I'm really not sure that it would have ANY redeeming nutritional qualities whatsoever. Just like Twinkies - had one the other day for the first time in about 30 years. It was fairly unpleasant.

Came across this while following the link of the day:
http://ihatemymessageboard.com/2009.....in-milk-gravy/

I think that's as far as you can get. Not only does it not have any redeeming nutritional qualities (it's worth noting, however, that it contains 1060% of the recommended daily amount of cholesterol), but it looks (and apparently smells) crap too. In fact, it looks like a prop from a zombie B movie.

1060%! That's a little surprising, really - you wouldn't think a company would be brave enough to make a product that toxic in this day and age of mandatory nutritional information...

Who would buy that? Who? Isn't that the sort of thing that only whacky Japanese game shows would buy to force their contestants to eat?

I feel ill..

Congratulations Mr. Orcawolf, you have successfully grossed me out. That is no mean feat, just ask Mr. Hutchence.

It's true. I showed him what I look like. Nothing.

Comparing you with Pork Brains in Milk Gravy is a no brainer (Baw haw haw, I see what I did thar!). Have I let up lusting after your hairy bits for one moment, even after seeing what you look like fo' reals?

Ah, but what would you do if I developed alopecia?

Shave you bald and oil you up.

Shaving apparently only makes regrowth faster.

Whole-body stubble? I hear it itches like a bitch. But that's okay, it's him, not me.

That oil might help...

Get 'im all slippery and listen to 'im squeeeeeeeal like a pig, boy, sqeeeeeeeeeeeeal like a pig?

Thinkhappythoughtsthinkhappythoughtsthinkhappythoughts...

You don't find the concept of a shaved, oiled up DiarmaidHutchence to be arousing?

Butbutbut... Whole-body stubble! :O

Well, only after a few days... Then you can get him to shave it all off again

I leave ye alone for a few days, and THIS is what I find?

Mmmmmmebbe...

Huzzah for editing!

Ja, absolutely. Although I'm far from expert which is why I also have an editor for my own crap Still, it's always invaluable to have a 3rd party go over your stuff before considering it finished, it's amazing how many mistakes they'll pick out that you'll miss when attempting to self edit.

Preach it, brother!

Really nice man, I fully enjoyed that read..

Keep up the great work dude, you've got some talent

Not judging by the trouble I'm having with the next one.

It happens man, I've been trying to write the story of DF for months now, But then again I'm just a hack..You've got some real talent, The thing that helps me the most is to relax and not over think, Just write down what he would do, naturally and stuff like that..I dunno, I bet that doesn't help at all >.===.<

We'll see. It's only the first draft. And I'm always missing you on XBox Live by less than an hour.