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This is a gift story for 
phoenixrage16 and Blazger I hope you two enjoy it.
Phoenix Rising - Volcan is discovered by a research team in a flow of lava outside of the ruins of what used to be Washington D.C. As he attempts to decipher his past, the present tries to exert its influence on him... And more than the phoenix rises from the ashes...
Starring:
Lauren Rivers - A scientist, and head of the research team. A female zebra.
Lyndon Brennan - A male elephant, and the chief of staff of the facility.
Doctor Auron Chambers - The facility medic, a red robin.
Blazger - The head of security, a black tiger with orange stripes.
Volcan - The phoenix, woken up to a strange new world.
Starr Everett - One of the Board of Directors, a male siamese cat.
Sarelle St. Alden - A vixen, and the third Board of Directors member.
Scott Kerran - One of Sarelle's officers.
Marroquin - A male white wolf with red markings.
Please keep all commentary constructive. As with most of my stories, it is open ended so that if the time and desire arrive, it can be continued.
Enjoy the sequel, Kitsune's Gambit, here...
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2131749
Dragon's Awakening (Part 3)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2218797/
Serpent's Salvation (Part 4)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3070582/
Nogitsune's Heart (Part 5)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3680584/
Hybrid Theory (Part 6)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6027030/
STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
phoenixrage16 and Blazger I hope you two enjoy it.Phoenix Rising - Volcan is discovered by a research team in a flow of lava outside of the ruins of what used to be Washington D.C. As he attempts to decipher his past, the present tries to exert its influence on him... And more than the phoenix rises from the ashes...
Starring:
Lauren Rivers - A scientist, and head of the research team. A female zebra.
Lyndon Brennan - A male elephant, and the chief of staff of the facility.
Doctor Auron Chambers - The facility medic, a red robin.
Blazger - The head of security, a black tiger with orange stripes.
Volcan - The phoenix, woken up to a strange new world.
Starr Everett - One of the Board of Directors, a male siamese cat.
Sarelle St. Alden - A vixen, and the third Board of Directors member.
Scott Kerran - One of Sarelle's officers.
Marroquin - A male white wolf with red markings.
Please keep all commentary constructive. As with most of my stories, it is open ended so that if the time and desire arrive, it can be continued.
Enjoy the sequel, Kitsune's Gambit, here...
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2131749
Dragon's Awakening (Part 3)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2218797/
Serpent's Salvation (Part 4)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3070582/
Nogitsune's Heart (Part 5)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3680584/
Hybrid Theory (Part 6)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6027030/
STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
Category Story / Fantasy
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I'm glad you enjoyed it, it was quite a bit of effort considering I usually do my writing during the weekends. I assume you noticed I removed the ice reference in the beginning, replacing it with more conventional stasis containment? And I didn't know where he came from, but usually I use Earth as a baseline, I've never been good at creating my own mental geographies of whole planets, you know?
Like I said, this is self contained, and accurate to no continuity but it's own. I only hope Blazger is as pleased with it. ;) And as you noticed, like most things I write, it isn't all wrapped up at the end. It could in theory be picked up, as there's still the matter of what Sarelle will do, who Marroquin works for, with... Who Volcan is looking for, and what happened before he ended up in the lava.
And now that you've read it, you have a taste for my style.
Like I said, this is self contained, and accurate to no continuity but it's own. I only hope Blazger is as pleased with it. ;) And as you noticed, like most things I write, it isn't all wrapped up at the end. It could in theory be picked up, as there's still the matter of what Sarelle will do, who Marroquin works for, with... Who Volcan is looking for, and what happened before he ended up in the lava.
And now that you've read it, you have a taste for my style.
Indeed I do. And I did notice the changed ice reference at the beginning.
However, this does make me wonder... who IS he waiting for? The only three of his friends who could live as long as he was sleeping are Voodoo, Hikari or Xavier....
This definitely gets my brain going...
Btw: You're a kickass writer! Your writing style's even better then mine!
However, this does make me wonder... who IS he waiting for? The only three of his friends who could live as long as he was sleeping are Voodoo, Hikari or Xavier....
This definitely gets my brain going...
Btw: You're a kickass writer! Your writing style's even better then mine!
I thought about it, and while him being frozen in ice is a neat visual image, I didn't have a reason why it had to be ice, so I was willing to make the change, since it didn't affect the story and made it more 'accurate'.
I had thought about Hikari, but I didn't want to commit to anything at this point, so that is why no name is mentioned. Maybe if it's continued, it'll factor into the story for part 2, if there ends up being one.
Thank you! Far too often I don't ever get the amount of feedback I want, good or bad. It's nice to have a little back and forth for a change. :) I appreciate the compliment, I have to thank quite a bit of experience for that. It took me a good several years to figure out how to build a world like that. It may sound odd, but I prefer 'realistic fantasy', worlds you can really see running. I can't stand a world where they just expect you to buy 'because we say so' for everything, and there doesn't seem to be a limit to people's powers or something like that. Just because someone CAN lift a tank, maybe there's a reason why they won't.
I had thought about Hikari, but I didn't want to commit to anything at this point, so that is why no name is mentioned. Maybe if it's continued, it'll factor into the story for part 2, if there ends up being one.
Thank you! Far too often I don't ever get the amount of feedback I want, good or bad. It's nice to have a little back and forth for a change. :) I appreciate the compliment, I have to thank quite a bit of experience for that. It took me a good several years to figure out how to build a world like that. It may sound odd, but I prefer 'realistic fantasy', worlds you can really see running. I can't stand a world where they just expect you to buy 'because we say so' for everything, and there doesn't seem to be a limit to people's powers or something like that. Just because someone CAN lift a tank, maybe there's a reason why they won't.
Alrighty. If you want to use Hikari in the story, if you decide to continue it, you'll have to talk to 
hikarishade. Although, she'll probably say yes; she loves it when people do artwork of her character.
hikarishade. Although, she'll probably say yes; she loves it when people do artwork of her character.
She would fit storywise, ie, Volcan's been away all that time, meanwhile she'd be the person that'd have actually lived through it, leaving that personal gap between the two of them, but I'm not sure. ;) But you may wish to have her read it, give her thoughts to me on the idea, maybe have her fill me in on what she thinks I need to know, and then I can go from there. ;)
Think she'd read it?
Think she'd read it?
Yeah, hook her up. See what she thinks.
I think your character and Blazgers integrated pretty well with mine, don't you think? Almost as if they were created for the same story. ;) I don't want to spoil too much for Blazger, but did you like his character's arc, not to mention the color commentary towards the end?
I think your character and Blazgers integrated pretty well with mine, don't you think? Almost as if they were created for the same story. ;) I don't want to spoil too much for Blazger, but did you like his character's arc, not to mention the color commentary towards the end?
Yeah, I did! It was quite intrigueing. But what REALLY caught me by surprise was it being Volcan's presence to awaken Blaze's pyromancy abilities. Normally, his presence just triples the power of other fire users around him, but I suppose this would be possible.
Oh yeah, if you want to give Volcan a weapon, give him the Blade of Hou-Ou, the Japanese Phoenix Guardian of the south. It was given to him by Hikari; just like Volcan's regular powers, he can't use it to harm people he trusts or cares about, but it makes an effective katana otherwise.
I'll run this by Hikari. Hopefully I can catch her before she loses her net.
Oh yeah, if you want to give Volcan a weapon, give him the Blade of Hou-Ou, the Japanese Phoenix Guardian of the south. It was given to him by Hikari; just like Volcan's regular powers, he can't use it to harm people he trusts or cares about, but it makes an effective katana otherwise.
I'll run this by Hikari. Hopefully I can catch her before she loses her net.
I thought it'd be more interesting if Blazger's character had an arc. Learning how to use his powers, what they do... and so on. Since most of my characters, particularly the anthros, are unpowered, this was a reason to explain it in the context of the story. As you noticed, no one else has powers like Volcan's, so for Blazger's character to be who he was, it made sense that the new element (volcan) would be the catalyst.
As for a weapon, I don't know. It is possible he could cover an ancient weapon, though if that were the case, maybe in part 3. For part 2 if there turns out to be one, I'd rather not give him too much power. And what exactly do you mean by 'he can't use it to harm people he trusts', does the weapon just know that he trusts someone? What if someone else used it?
*noddles* If she reads it, have her comment here. :)
As for a weapon, I don't know. It is possible he could cover an ancient weapon, though if that were the case, maybe in part 3. For part 2 if there turns out to be one, I'd rather not give him too much power. And what exactly do you mean by 'he can't use it to harm people he trusts', does the weapon just know that he trusts someone? What if someone else used it?
*noddles* If she reads it, have her comment here. :)
Okay. What you could do is have Volcan remember that he left something hidding in a cave in that same volcano where they found him. In that cave, when they locate it, is a big chest with the key hidden nearby; I'll leave that part up to you. When they find the key, they open the chest to find Volcan's sword (the Hou-Ou Blade), his halberd and, just for drama, a photograph of him, Hikari and Volcan's mother.
How's that sound?
How's that sound?
Well, if I were to integrate that... it would either not be there when the team (NPC level chars) went to find it, meaning someone else already took it, or there'd be a trap.. Either way, it would leave a place for the story to go.
You still didn't tell me how the sword can't kill someone he trusts? Or was that just a figure of speech?
You still didn't tell me how the sword can't kill someone he trusts? Or was that just a figure of speech?
It's the same as regular phoenix magic; remember I mentioned anyone Volcan doesn't know or doesn't trust is burned when they touch him? In the case of the sword, it passes straight through them without leaving a single cut on them.
Also, the sword can only be used for battle by a phoenix, as it was forged from the talon of an ancient phoenix. Anyone else that tries to use it, it can't be used for fighting. However, pressing the sword against an open injury, whether it's being used by Volcan or someone else, will heal the injury. Hikari gave Volcan the sword because she wasn't able to use it.
Also, the sword can only be used for battle by a phoenix, as it was forged from the talon of an ancient phoenix. Anyone else that tries to use it, it can't be used for fighting. However, pressing the sword against an open injury, whether it's being used by Volcan or someone else, will heal the injury. Hikari gave Volcan the sword because she wasn't able to use it.
Oh shoot, before I forget, the blade is also enchanted in another way; when Volcan holds it, his own abilities triple in power. However, he's not very good with a sword X3, so if he uses it, his fighting style is less skillful then when he'd use his halberd. This could leave him vulnerable.
*nods* You may have said that, but I forget things from time to time.
The key factor here is that the item has to have a past and a future. I just had what might be a wicked idea for what to do for the second one, though unless there's a reason for the sword to be here, I might not be able to use it. If I do, likely it's affects/abilities may be altered to fit the world, or an explanation offered, as this world largely is 'science based'. I'll keep it in mind, though.
The key factor here is that the item has to have a past and a future. I just had what might be a wicked idea for what to do for the second one, though unless there's a reason for the sword to be here, I might not be able to use it. If I do, likely it's affects/abilities may be altered to fit the world, or an explanation offered, as this world largely is 'science based'. I'll keep it in mind, though.
YAY! *grins* One thing you should know, I don't forget things in stories, so if at all possible, I make links to earlier installments. If there is a part two, you can bet it will pick up from part 1 in some way. :)
If you have time I recommend you give the Whisper series a read, it's a space show, but I think it's one of my better ones. :)
If you have time I recommend you give the Whisper series a read, it's a space show, but I think it's one of my better ones. :)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/1941255/
I've written a total of 21, the first 13 are posted here, in order in my gallery. 14-21 will be on my website, but my webmaster is
shrag so it might be a while due to his eye issues. Though if you get that far I can fix you up. ;)
But I do recommend you at least read the first one. :)
I've written a total of 21, the first 13 are posted here, in order in my gallery. 14-21 will be on my website, but my webmaster is
shrag so it might be a while due to his eye issues. Though if you get that far I can fix you up. ;) But I do recommend you at least read the first one. :)
*grins* Glad you enjoyed it. :) I was going to use one of my own characters, but then I figured Blazger and Volcan worked well together, plus Lauren and Blazger have some sexual tension going there.... Whether or not they're mates or really want to breed each other's brains out, haven't figured for sure yet....
But yeah, I took both Volcan and Blazger and did them Lauren style. *wink* I thought it would be a neat way to work his fire in seeing as none of my characters have a characteristic like that, so I worked it into the story. :)
Ooh, candles.... Does this mean dinner?
But yeah, I took both Volcan and Blazger and did them Lauren style. *wink* I thought it would be a neat way to work his fire in seeing as none of my characters have a characteristic like that, so I worked it into the story. :)
Ooh, candles.... Does this mean dinner?
Right now, it's looking like a friday date for the completion of part 2. I've been working on side projects during the week, and my own stuff on the weekends. ;) *winks* I think you'll like it. :) Blazger's role is a bit smaller in part 2, but my aim is to give him a big role to play in part 3. ;)
The second part introduces a couple of new characters, a dragon, Kate Coyle (my snake), and hikarishade, among others, and the plan is to deliberately leave a direction for the third installment.
I wasn't sure if you'd be like OMG I love it or you fubared my character, so that's part of the reason Blazger had a smaller role in part 2, but he's still there. :) *grins* I'll be sure to keep him in part 3. ;)
hikarishade, among others, and the plan is to deliberately leave a direction for the third installment. I wasn't sure if you'd be like OMG I love it or you fubared my character, so that's part of the reason Blazger had a smaller role in part 2, but he's still there. :) *grins* I'll be sure to keep him in part 3. ;)
I didn't think you would be. :) *huggles* I usually like ensemble casts, stories where one or two characters gets all the choice roles seems to waste too much in my opinion. :) I'd rather have a family of characters. :)
Hikari's role will play into part 2 and 3, as while Volcan has no idea what kind of world he woke up in, she knows all too well. :)
Hikari's role will play into part 2 and 3, as while Volcan has no idea what kind of world he woke up in, she knows all too well. :)
*chuckles as she finishes off the story and reads all the comment exchanges* Very very well done. *applauds*
I can probably help you fill in a couple of holes that Volcan pointed out. Mostly the fact of how Volcan got to earth. Thats easy. Hikari could have brought him there however long ago. Earth is Hikari's home, and she could have easily pulled him there in ages past to help with whatever or something... Your digression.
As for 'her' I dont mind if you use Hikari in it, though she is likely to be in Japan again at this point, or any other asian area depending on how your worlds set up (some future settings have japan pretty much covered in water via global warming or something ect). Though if he made a trip to an Inari shrine he could probably get her to make an appearance regardless of location. (Though by this point Hikari and Volcan are probably good friends with benefits, I don't know if they would still be romantically involved. I would leave that up to you, though Hikari's kind of... hmm.. how to put it... She gets bored after about a century and starts looking for some new tail. XD)
You can note me for in depth detail about Hikari if you decide you want to use her (ie for abilities and personality, ect)
I can probably help you fill in a couple of holes that Volcan pointed out. Mostly the fact of how Volcan got to earth. Thats easy. Hikari could have brought him there however long ago. Earth is Hikari's home, and she could have easily pulled him there in ages past to help with whatever or something... Your digression.
As for 'her' I dont mind if you use Hikari in it, though she is likely to be in Japan again at this point, or any other asian area depending on how your worlds set up (some future settings have japan pretty much covered in water via global warming or something ect). Though if he made a trip to an Inari shrine he could probably get her to make an appearance regardless of location. (Though by this point Hikari and Volcan are probably good friends with benefits, I don't know if they would still be romantically involved. I would leave that up to you, though Hikari's kind of... hmm.. how to put it... She gets bored after about a century and starts looking for some new tail. XD)
You can note me for in depth detail about Hikari if you decide you want to use her (ie for abilities and personality, ect)
I'm glad you liked it. :) *grins* This may just be me, but I kind of assumed that his 'war of man and anthro' was already set on some variant of earth. *shrugs* But I doubt how he got there will really be important, though you never know...
What does an Inari shrine do?
The odds are fairly likely that if she showed up again... Well, I do have an idea for how they'd meet, but it all depends on where the ending would go that would determine if they could... You know. ;)
Why don't you just note me with a run down, or give me the readers digest version here so I don't lose it, just in case. I know you might be losing net soon. As with Volcan and Blaze, there may be some 'artist liberty' taken with any information you provide, though I try to keep it as close to model as story allows.
What does an Inari shrine do?
The odds are fairly likely that if she showed up again... Well, I do have an idea for how they'd meet, but it all depends on where the ending would go that would determine if they could... You know. ;)
Why don't you just note me with a run down, or give me the readers digest version here so I don't lose it, just in case. I know you might be losing net soon. As with Volcan and Blaze, there may be some 'artist liberty' taken with any information you provide, though I try to keep it as close to model as story allows.
Ah, so you're Xavier, I seem to remember the name from War Of Man And Anthro, I read the first 90 something pages.... Cept I gotta be honest, I'm a bit fuzzy on the details, fill me in? :)
For this particular continuity I was able to find a way to work in Blazger, Hikari, and of course since the first one was written for Volcan, I used his character. Blazger was easy, Hikari was a bit harder, but I left an out so I could bring her in in part 2. ;)
For this particular continuity I was able to find a way to work in Blazger, Hikari, and of course since the first one was written for Volcan, I used his character. Blazger was easy, Hikari was a bit harder, but I left an out so I could bring her in in part 2. ;)
Xavier is a dhampir void kitsune whoses soul is intwined with half of that of a demonic god. he is a year or two older than volcan. his twin scimitars, Light of Dawn and Shade of Dusk were forged by him. his personality is basicaly a loyal psychotic master ranger (D&D level 17 equal) who is all so a merc. need more just pm me
his mother's family is demonic, her father being full demon and his father and mother being full demons. Xavier's demonic essence is rival to that of a god (eg. Aries) though it is incomplete (which will be explained in the story I am writing) and I will read both.
on thing, if you do have Xav in this he would most likely not be descreate with appearances and get noticed with some extreme sports stunt
on thing, if you do have Xav in this he would most likely not be descreate with appearances and get noticed with some extreme sports stunt
doesn't truly matter if you put in Xavier anywhere, he can cope with nearly any enviroment but he is prone to show off and be arrogant at times...just remember, similar to a spriggan( tree nymphs who need to be killed thrice to permently kill them) he has to be kill twice to ensure true death...
resets each day, the regeneration has to do with his strange black blood, the black blood cells are just like stem cells that react with oxygen, or the chemical signatures of viruses, to regenerate or destroy, like streroids and antibiotics in the same cell
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