very very good P.... there are those who live by transference of anxt.

You're a good person P....

V.

It seems so... but as much as he might come to me, I think he more wants somebody to complain to than a friend.

Damn that guy, he spreads his powerlessness all around! Okay, jokes aside, good poem. Short and with a good message. There are those who choose to be unhappy and nobody can change them. Sad. But, your poem is an interesting read. Good work.

Thank you.

RTF. My nemesis. We meet again.

I agree with vixyy on this one, though I do think you have a few useless words in that 3rd line there. "He said his friends abandoned him" just seems to flow so much better with the rest of the piece, matching length and pace with the other lines.

I would also maybe remove the line "Through all my reasoning and cajoling" just to even out the length of the two parts, but that is mostly my personal prefrence and has no baring on how good the thing actually reads (an aesthetic change and nothing more).

Question, did you do the first three lines of the first part starting with "He" and the first three lines of the second part starting with "I" intentionally? It makes a very nice contrast.

You don't like the RTF format? I actually thought it was a little more universal than .doc... ah well. I did repost the entire thing in the comment box so that you don't NEED to download it if you don't want.

I'm pretty sure that this poem could use tweaking... I'm not a poet, for one, and two, I quite literally wrote this not a few hours after the event happened. Will I actually change it? Doubtful.

The pronoun switching was indeed intentional.

Poetry is surprisingly hard, which is why this caught my eye (it is quite good). Not a lot of people realize that which is why you get so many very bad poems by wannabe poets.

Heh... well, it's also why you won't see much at all in terms of poetry from me. But thank you for the compliment.

Not bad. The meaning is quite clear.

And Ive been there before. on BOTH sides of the table, both as a depressive and someone trying to help.

It's an ugly cycle.

Same... but sooner or later you have to try and snap yourself out of it.

Indubitably. Eventually it's about pulling yourself out, even if it's with someone else's hand around your wrist.

Pretty much, babe. *smiles and snugs*