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Changelog:
-Day 4 is complete
-Changed the title theme song into something a little more fitting
-New Character sprites
-This update is a little different from the rest, so I’d love any feedback you guys have on where the story’s gone so far!
-Grammar and typo fixes
Changelog:
-Day 4 is complete
-Changed the title theme song into something a little more fitting
-New Character sprites
-This update is a little different from the rest, so I’d love any feedback you guys have on where the story’s gone so far!
-Grammar and typo fixes
Category All / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 1004 x 788px
File Size 898.7 kB
This update...this update just blew my mind! I loved everything! Not gonna spoil anything, but this was such a great update, the pacing and the amazingness of everything was just so well done! I just can't wait to see the next update!
Also I keep swapping back and forth with who I'm interested the most with. First was Sissel, then went to Phillip, now its to Owen. Why does every character have to be so great?!
Also I keep swapping back and forth with who I'm interested the most with. First was Sissel, then went to Phillip, now its to Owen. Why does every character have to be so great?!
Well, that escalated quickly. An interesting day to follow and I like the involvement of the wishes and their corrupted counterparts. Will be interesting to learn more about them and how we can make some wishes come true. One thing, though, that kinda keeps bugging me: I started the VN with the initial idea, that I can try to pursue any of the three friends in a romantic sense. But the more I play, the more the story seems framed to push Owen and his roommate together. Which kinda bothers me, because I don't like to play homewrecker on them by pursuing either if the story keeps putting so much emphasis on shipping them.
Obligatory Warnings: SPOILERS, BLOCK O’ TEXT
Praise:
>Tense, dramatic, and fun, with a couple of good twists.
>You somehow made Phillip even more interesting, but I guess I should have seen that plot twist coming.
>Loved the handling of Bradley’s introduction, specifically the “choices” right before her appearance.
>The resolution not only made Owen more likeable to me (since it got rid of the one outstanding issue against him for me), but opened up plausible routes for characters to “get together.” What I mean: I assume the MC will end up with one of the trio, but I wondered if the two you didn’t end up with could end up together. However, while it was obvious that Phillip liked Sissel and Owen liked Phillip, any kind of relationship with a character other than the MC seemed improbable. However, with the issues between Owen and Phillip resolved, an OwenXPhillip coupling is now more plausible. Add that to a likely positive response from Sissel when he learns that Phillip is the Black Cat, a SisselXPhillip pairing seems very likely if the MC pairs with Owen. Now all we need is a reason for OwenXSissel, but I assume resolving their issues is an inevitable part of the upcoming story.
Critique:
>At first, I really liked it when just a few lines after the endpoint of the previous update I was presented with the choice of choosing who to side with. It was unexpected and very tense; even though I quickly decided to side with Phillip, the gravity of the situation made me hesitate for a few minutes, mainly because I was afraid of the consequences. Here comes the critique: the fact that there were none. I assume that you probably did not want to make diverging paths here because the story required the scenes to go a very specific way, but it was disappointing that what seemed to be a very important decision amounted to little more than the next few lines being different.
>This one is a little less about the story and is very minor, but I have to ask: what is with the elephant tranquilizer? It seems very odd that anyone would carry a tranquilizer gun around with them, especially a teacher (you would think, for self-defense, an actual gun, a tazer, or pepper-spray). Not to mention the fact that it is an elephant tranquilizer! Definite overkill. Of course I recognize the story-related reasoning for it (enough danger to put Phillip and the MC in mortal peril while leaving a realistic chance of Phillip surviving when he took the “bullet”) and it can probably be explained away by the Remnant influencing Dolores to acquire the gun. But where would he get such a thing? I doubt they are sold at gun shops, or any store a teacher would have access to.
Opinion on new theme: I really liked the original theme and saw no reason to change it. However, the new theme fits just as well to me and I like it equally.
Praise:
>Tense, dramatic, and fun, with a couple of good twists.
>You somehow made Phillip even more interesting, but I guess I should have seen that plot twist coming.
>Loved the handling of Bradley’s introduction, specifically the “choices” right before her appearance.
>The resolution not only made Owen more likeable to me (since it got rid of the one outstanding issue against him for me), but opened up plausible routes for characters to “get together.” What I mean: I assume the MC will end up with one of the trio, but I wondered if the two you didn’t end up with could end up together. However, while it was obvious that Phillip liked Sissel and Owen liked Phillip, any kind of relationship with a character other than the MC seemed improbable. However, with the issues between Owen and Phillip resolved, an OwenXPhillip coupling is now more plausible. Add that to a likely positive response from Sissel when he learns that Phillip is the Black Cat, a SisselXPhillip pairing seems very likely if the MC pairs with Owen. Now all we need is a reason for OwenXSissel, but I assume resolving their issues is an inevitable part of the upcoming story.
Critique:
>At first, I really liked it when just a few lines after the endpoint of the previous update I was presented with the choice of choosing who to side with. It was unexpected and very tense; even though I quickly decided to side with Phillip, the gravity of the situation made me hesitate for a few minutes, mainly because I was afraid of the consequences. Here comes the critique: the fact that there were none. I assume that you probably did not want to make diverging paths here because the story required the scenes to go a very specific way, but it was disappointing that what seemed to be a very important decision amounted to little more than the next few lines being different.
>This one is a little less about the story and is very minor, but I have to ask: what is with the elephant tranquilizer? It seems very odd that anyone would carry a tranquilizer gun around with them, especially a teacher (you would think, for self-defense, an actual gun, a tazer, or pepper-spray). Not to mention the fact that it is an elephant tranquilizer! Definite overkill. Of course I recognize the story-related reasoning for it (enough danger to put Phillip and the MC in mortal peril while leaving a realistic chance of Phillip surviving when he took the “bullet”) and it can probably be explained away by the Remnant influencing Dolores to acquire the gun. But where would he get such a thing? I doubt they are sold at gun shops, or any store a teacher would have access to.
Opinion on new theme: I really liked the original theme and saw no reason to change it. However, the new theme fits just as well to me and I like it equally.
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