This one's uber-awesome! =D

Why thanks you! =3

This is also very nice.

I'm curious what happened in the third verse. Everywhere else, except for the final two lines, you kept up an ABCB rhyme scheme, but there you went ABCCDEFE, which was odd.

For someone who claims not to understand meter, you did an excellent job of keeping it in most of the time.

the POWered WIND was CHILLing,
AS was MOST of WHAT the OLD man SAID
and QUICKly DID his COAL-coat FLEE,
to LEAVE but SIlence IN his STEAD.

You hear that ba-DUM ba-DUM ba-DUM rhythm? That's the iambic meter. Most of what you wrote there follow it, with four such in each line, making it iambic tetrameter.

If you analyze each of the lines, you'll see that there are several that don't follow it. That's okay, but you should try to avoid it, choosing words and phrasing that better fits the meter you've set.

Keep it up. Good work.

I replied, but forgot to reply to YOU directly! (my bad) x3

Hehe, yeah, I do hear it! x3

I'm mostly familiar with meter, thanks to my wonderful "Intro to Poetry" class I had last semester. I was a bit shaky on the meter section though, as there were many kinds apparently. I know (iambic) is the most common, but there's also: dactyl, spondaic, pendantic, and a few others i think. It got rather confusing, so I usually just stuck to the iambic feet. =3

So it's best to have a uniform meter throughout the poem's entirety?

I guess, i kinda have a habit of wanting to switch it up a bit sometimes. Though as for this poem's (stanza 3), I felt the need to give Death a twist. He had his OWN little stanza and speaking part! x3

I understand all that you've said though, so no worries there. I always knew meter was pretty much my only issue. =P

I'll try and work harder on it. ^^

(So how did I do with my imagery and such? You know I like to pay attention to that more, cause it's fun.)

Thanks for your comments. Oh and btw, do you have an IM program? When I have the time, we can discuss this kind of stuff...that is, if you don't mind. =)

It is usually best to have a consistent meter throughout a poem, unless you have a specific reason to change it.

I once wrote a poem that started out with iambic tetrameter, that slowly changed to free verse, to show the breakdown of order into chaos. It didn't work very well, but my English teacher loved it!

Don't worry about your imagery. You have that down quite well.

Hehe, I gotcha! =P

In cases like that, poetry is truly just up the the reader. My English prof. is what got me started again! =3

She enjoyed mostly all of my poems because they were just packed with vivid imagery. I guess she overlooked my meter faults, cause she never ONCE told me anything about it! lol

This piece of work had my mind going in many different directions, which of course is a good thing.
For me, this a very powerful speaking poem. I can almost relate to it.
But anyway, another brilliant poem, my friend. Truly one of your best. ^_^

Knowing you (and I totally do), I'm sure you CAN relate to this piece...IN more ways than one! =P

I'm glad you could feel the potency of the message! =D

Death is a common subject, but since when would you want to feel sympathy for it? Find beauty in it? Shelter it even? o.O

Someone is amazing.