FA+
Shop
2135
Views
Views
29
Favorites
Favorites
Category
Story / General Furry Art
Species Snake / Serpent
Size 120 x 120
File Size 136.1 kB
Report this content
★
More from Amethystine
Listed in Folders
Ensemble (The Poor Little Snake Charmer 2)
The above story is based on THIS PICTURE: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/19262072/ by 
Amaranth
~
This is a SEQUEL to THIS STORY: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/15620072/
--which was itself based on THIS PIC: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/17775626/
--and it starred THESE CHARACTERS: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/15580254/
~
Also, this story/art combo has a musical component! A SONG! Amazing! It was created by
PlayPossum and 
Mustang, and is found here: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/18369610/
~
As it stated at the top, this is for the picture 'A Toast to the Free', by the incomparable Amaranth, my perfect 'Partenaire En Transgressions.' :}===<
The aforementioned art was the result of an auction, for the purposes of crediting, the winners were:
Hioshiru, 
EpicDragon55, 
Furaiya, 
CoraCroma, 
WanderingPariah, 
Saethwr, and 
SamiWolf, and this story is for them most of all, aside from it being, as ever, for my dama damsel muse.
I would list which characters the auction winners ended up being, in the story, but that would be spoiling some of the fun, so read on!
~
It was a challenge to write this, and I want to thank all involved, (Amaranth and PlayPossum first, and all the winners) for the chance to try my hand at something so complex and inter-connected. I didn't have to do it this way, of course, but I just kept coming up with interesting ways for the characters to interact and what conflicts, hopes and wants and needs they might all have.
Thanks for your attention and I hope you enjoy / enjoyed it! :D
.
Amaranth~
This is a SEQUEL to THIS STORY: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/15620072/
--which was itself based on THIS PIC: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/17775626/
--and it starred THESE CHARACTERS: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/15580254/
~
Also, this story/art combo has a musical component! A SONG! Amazing! It was created by
PlayPossum and 
Mustang, and is found here: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/18369610/~
As it stated at the top, this is for the picture 'A Toast to the Free', by the incomparable Amaranth, my perfect 'Partenaire En Transgressions.' :}===<
The aforementioned art was the result of an auction, for the purposes of crediting, the winners were:
Hioshiru, 
EpicDragon55, 
Furaiya, 
CoraCroma, 
WanderingPariah, 
Saethwr, and 
SamiWolf, and this story is for them most of all, aside from it being, as ever, for my dama damsel muse.I would list which characters the auction winners ended up being, in the story, but that would be spoiling some of the fun, so read on!
~
It was a challenge to write this, and I want to thank all involved, (Amaranth and PlayPossum first, and all the winners) for the chance to try my hand at something so complex and inter-connected. I didn't have to do it this way, of course, but I just kept coming up with interesting ways for the characters to interact and what conflicts, hopes and wants and needs they might all have.
Thanks for your attention and I hope you enjoy / enjoyed it! :D
.
Category Story / General Furry Art
Species Snake / Serpent
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 136.1 kB
Wow! Really amazing story, really well done with how no one, I mean no one, had a name mentioned, they only went by names like, the Librarian, The Soldier, The Adventurer, The Muscian, The Prince, and so forth! But I had to reread this a few times especially when I found out which one Vulkin was, kind liked how he turned out, though what he was about to do to that thief with their lizard mount was... Well, typical for Takloree. Vulkin is a leader of his people and a war master mind, he has dark methods in war and lives by a saying, "Cross me and I'll knock you down. Cross my people and I'll make a example out of you." This was a clear example of that, though nearly getting someone's head bitten off wouldn't be something difficult for him to do. I also see he ended up having a strong bound with Keyrah as well did the other member, of course there is a bend there I'd rather not get into all details on how he would have actually acted, but in the end it was very well and Vulkin was more protested as a understanding and noble warrior, only much more nicer and accepting than how he actually is. But hey, it was a very fun story to read and I very much enjoyed it and I'm sure we all did as well!
Thank you, sir. :}
Did you happen to read the original Charmer and Python story? If so, you would have seen that the nameless style is a staple for the series!
I'm glad you liked Vulkin's portrayal as much as you did, and I'm sorry for needing to bend his character a little to fit this story and this world and this theme, but.. well, I like to think that all the characters in these Charmer & Python stories are a different version from their original selves, in a different world, living different lives. The Soldier would have had a totally different life, with different things influencing how he developed. Maybe some of him is the same as your original version, but other things would have been swayed, by this other life.
Alternatively, you can think of it as an alt-universe twin, who looks the same but is really a totally different person, even if there are other similarities.
In any case, I don't think you're actually complaining or anything, and I'm glad you liked it, since you were the largest contributor!
Thank you for reading, and for your comments, here.
~
To your other comment: haha, yesss, I was quite pleased with the cactus line. It seems so obvious now, haha. I suppose.. that, or porcupine! But, in a desert, a cactus seems more appropriate.
Did you happen to read the original Charmer and Python story? If so, you would have seen that the nameless style is a staple for the series!
I'm glad you liked Vulkin's portrayal as much as you did, and I'm sorry for needing to bend his character a little to fit this story and this world and this theme, but.. well, I like to think that all the characters in these Charmer & Python stories are a different version from their original selves, in a different world, living different lives. The Soldier would have had a totally different life, with different things influencing how he developed. Maybe some of him is the same as your original version, but other things would have been swayed, by this other life.
Alternatively, you can think of it as an alt-universe twin, who looks the same but is really a totally different person, even if there are other similarities.
In any case, I don't think you're actually complaining or anything, and I'm glad you liked it, since you were the largest contributor!
Thank you for reading, and for your comments, here.
~
To your other comment: haha, yesss, I was quite pleased with the cactus line. It seems so obvious now, haha. I suppose.. that, or porcupine! But, in a desert, a cactus seems more appropriate.
Mmhmm, it seemed fitting. :}
Too bad he (the Explorer) "had to" chum around with those wingless two, right? Haha. I mean, with how it's stated that he travels on the ground with them, on the lizard, only sometimes flying up to do scouting. I'm sure he gets plenty of flight time in, though. Gotta keep the wings in shape / exercise them. :}
Too bad he (the Explorer) "had to" chum around with those wingless two, right? Haha. I mean, with how it's stated that he travels on the ground with them, on the lizard, only sometimes flying up to do scouting. I'm sure he gets plenty of flight time in, though. Gotta keep the wings in shape / exercise them. :}
Thank you! :}===<
And, seriously, Kayin, thank you very much for being such a great supporter of WhiteMantis. I tried to make all the characters' roles as equal as I could, but given how your Thief was in both parts, I couldn't help but give him kind of a central place in things.
And, seriously, Kayin, thank you very much for being such a great supporter of WhiteMantis. I tried to make all the characters' roles as equal as I could, but given how your Thief was in both parts, I couldn't help but give him kind of a central place in things.
Thank you seriously! I was genuinely surprised that The Thief centered so greatly. I am honored. Thank you so very much for putting so much hard work into this. I love supporting WhiteMantis and her work. She and her work always make the day brighter.
I am looking forward to the tales of the Thief's further travels and adventures!
Cheers!
-K
I am looking forward to the tales of the Thief's further travels and adventures!
Cheers!
-K
Well, that was an awesome read! My favorite part must have been when the seamstress was hidden inside the Python's coils, it must have been so cozy, warm and soft in there. A shame the situation didn't allow for her to enjoy the position she found herself in, not for long anyways. =P
Writing on FA these days is a thankless choice of activity. Commenting is at an all time low on anything, even fabulous art.
This submission we're sitting on now is from almost 3 years ago (when commenting on FA was at a high, I believe), and it had a built-in audience of people who had paid good money to be in the large group art-piece that it's based on. So the comments you see here are mostly from them. EpigDragon55, Saethwr and WanderingPariah were in the story, so of course they'd read and comment.
Menagerie is one of my closest friends, so there's only 2 people here aside from you who didn't have any particular reason to appear and lend an ear. And they probably came in because of it being linked to from my post or WhiteMantis' post of the large picture it's part of.
Anyway, my point is, writing isn't something that's going to get a lot of attention, even when it's good or even when it's part of a bigger, eye-catching project. And thus, you can't have attention be a reason you want to write. It should be to express yourself, or entertain yourself or people closest to you.
All my writing lately has been for one friend or another. Like, for WhiteMantis or Menagerie, or for myself. If I put it up and others like it, that's just a bonus. :}
~
Anyway, thank you for reading this and the story that came before it (the two Snake&Charmer ones, I mean), I really do appreciate you delving into my back catalogue. Thanks for the faves on both S&C stories too! <3
This submission we're sitting on now is from almost 3 years ago (when commenting on FA was at a high, I believe), and it had a built-in audience of people who had paid good money to be in the large group art-piece that it's based on. So the comments you see here are mostly from them. EpigDragon55, Saethwr and WanderingPariah were in the story, so of course they'd read and comment.
Menagerie is one of my closest friends, so there's only 2 people here aside from you who didn't have any particular reason to appear and lend an ear. And they probably came in because of it being linked to from my post or WhiteMantis' post of the large picture it's part of.
Anyway, my point is, writing isn't something that's going to get a lot of attention, even when it's good or even when it's part of a bigger, eye-catching project. And thus, you can't have attention be a reason you want to write. It should be to express yourself, or entertain yourself or people closest to you.
All my writing lately has been for one friend or another. Like, for WhiteMantis or Menagerie, or for myself. If I put it up and others like it, that's just a bonus. :}
~
Anyway, thank you for reading this and the story that came before it (the two Snake&Charmer ones, I mean), I really do appreciate you delving into my back catalogue. Thanks for the faves on both S&C stories too! <3
I don't write for attention, I write for myself. It's my passion and I'm hoping to make a living off of it someday. The reason I would like some comments is because I need feedback on them to get better.
That aside, you're very welcome. I really enjoyed your stories.
That aside, you're very welcome. I really enjoyed your stories.
I didn't mean to imply that you were doing it for attention.
Still, if you want to make a living off of it, you'll NEED attention (at some point), so that's a bit of a tricky proposition.
Anyway, yeah, if you're looking for feedback, I bet there's a group somewhere in the forums or one of the FA accounts that's not an individual but a group thing.. somewhere where you could link to your work and ask for constructive criticism.
Still, if you want to make a living off of it, you'll NEED attention (at some point), so that's a bit of a tricky proposition.
Anyway, yeah, if you're looking for feedback, I bet there's a group somewhere in the forums or one of the FA accounts that's not an individual but a group thing.. somewhere where you could link to your work and ask for constructive criticism.
Now we finally see the dreaded love-triangle in action. And you come with them akimbo! Two for the price of one story. :P Not that there's anything wrong some relationship drama. *sweats guiltily*
Nice and long story from and nice and long snakey. All very cozy, and very much like a classic comedy at the end wherein everyone ends up satisfied and it makes me feel guilty how much I like super happy endings.
Personally, for its length I think it really helps that the characters are just their 'roles'. And for meeting the requirement given to include other people's personal characters, it's a good solution to eschew their actual names (in the case it may conflict with the existing setting). Honestly, when I chew through stories at an expedited rate I usually just forget the names anyway-- especially in furry stuff with having to remember species, character affectations and 'plot elements'; the name is the last thing I care to remember.
Once I got through to Act2 wherein we discover the truth about the Prince's female suitors at the point where the Falconer discovers the Seamstress's feathery accessory, I was very much elated in how you tied in the hint from Act1 when the Charmer had mismatched the two women's roles because of their dress that they were accented with baubles from their true counterpart. So sweet! Aside from that very keen idea about those specific characters, you also had me caring a lot about the rest of the multitudinous cast and their wants! Well done.
And... I have to point out a few little errors that stuck out to me:
You have a few 'the the's.
In vis-a-vis, the (properly) accented 'a' is unrecognized
When the Librarian and Thief are talking Act2 the Librarian says about the Soldier and Explorer "...Maybe they saw something like what they in a play they saw once." is a confusing sentence.
And 'once the Prince's wanderlust wares,' should it be wears?
Thanks for the great story!
Nice and long story from and nice and long snakey. All very cozy, and very much like a classic comedy at the end wherein everyone ends up satisfied and it makes me feel guilty how much I like super happy endings.
Personally, for its length I think it really helps that the characters are just their 'roles'. And for meeting the requirement given to include other people's personal characters, it's a good solution to eschew their actual names (in the case it may conflict with the existing setting). Honestly, when I chew through stories at an expedited rate I usually just forget the names anyway-- especially in furry stuff with having to remember species, character affectations and 'plot elements'; the name is the last thing I care to remember.
Once I got through to Act2 wherein we discover the truth about the Prince's female suitors at the point where the Falconer discovers the Seamstress's feathery accessory, I was very much elated in how you tied in the hint from Act1 when the Charmer had mismatched the two women's roles because of their dress that they were accented with baubles from their true counterpart. So sweet! Aside from that very keen idea about those specific characters, you also had me caring a lot about the rest of the multitudinous cast and their wants! Well done.
And... I have to point out a few little errors that stuck out to me:
You have a few 'the the's.
In vis-a-vis, the (properly) accented 'a' is unrecognized
When the Librarian and Thief are talking Act2 the Librarian says about the Soldier and Explorer "...Maybe they saw something like what they in a play they saw once." is a confusing sentence.
And 'once the Prince's wanderlust wares,' should it be wears?
Thanks for the great story!
Two love triangles? Oh, this sounds juicy. I might have to re-read this one, as I think it's long enough ago and was complex enough for me to have forgotten great vast swathes of it! O:
Happy endings are a crowd-pleaser and I was aiming to please a literal little crowd of people, after all. :}===<
Yes, no one wants to have to remember ALL the names I would have needed to throw into this tale. With 'The Charmer' and 'The Python' already simply being those names to begin with, and given that the first story also had no names, it seemed fitting/appropriate.
Also, if I had used actual names, the auction-winners might have not liked the names they were given by me, and if I had used the names they had for their own characters, it would have made it so there was a bit of a mish-mash of name-styles, just as you said. :> Very astute!
I am happy to have made you elated, then! I remember that detail about the Falconer and Seamstress now that you bring it up. I was happy with that, as I recall. :}
Also, isn't it nice when you get a chance to use a word like 'multitudinous'?? :D
~
I've corrected the 'the the's and it's too bad about the 'à' but FA probably never recognized it. I'm usually aware of those. Maybe FA used to be able to display that character. *shrugs*
That line isn't just confusing, it's wrong! It should be 'maybe they saw something like that in a play they saw once'
Yes, it should be 'wears', indeed. I've corrected all of these mistakes/oversights now, but I'm not sure who else after us will get to benefit from the updates. I doubt I'll have another reader quite as dedicated as you! <3
And, as always, thanks for the kind words! :}===<
Happy endings are a crowd-pleaser and I was aiming to please a literal little crowd of people, after all. :}===<
Yes, no one wants to have to remember ALL the names I would have needed to throw into this tale. With 'The Charmer' and 'The Python' already simply being those names to begin with, and given that the first story also had no names, it seemed fitting/appropriate.
Also, if I had used actual names, the auction-winners might have not liked the names they were given by me, and if I had used the names they had for their own characters, it would have made it so there was a bit of a mish-mash of name-styles, just as you said. :> Very astute!
I am happy to have made you elated, then! I remember that detail about the Falconer and Seamstress now that you bring it up. I was happy with that, as I recall. :}
Also, isn't it nice when you get a chance to use a word like 'multitudinous'?? :D
~
I've corrected the 'the the's and it's too bad about the 'à' but FA probably never recognized it. I'm usually aware of those. Maybe FA used to be able to display that character. *shrugs*
That line isn't just confusing, it's wrong! It should be 'maybe they saw something like that in a play they saw once'
Yes, it should be 'wears', indeed. I've corrected all of these mistakes/oversights now, but I'm not sure who else after us will get to benefit from the updates. I doubt I'll have another reader quite as dedicated as you! <3
And, as always, thanks for the kind words! :}===<
Ah! I kinda feel embarrassed if I keep making you your old work. :P
I'm just trying to vary my vocabulary! Gotta get more comfortable using the 'big words'.
And I do hope there are more people that end up looking through old works. I hope I'm not unique in this. But maybe some people only fancy red border work here.
Forgot to +Fav this!
I'm just trying to vary my vocabulary! Gotta get more comfortable using the 'big words'.
And I do hope there are more people that end up looking through old works. I hope I'm not unique in this. But maybe some people only fancy red border work here.
Forgot to +Fav this!
Thanks for the fave now as well. :>
Don't be embarrassed, though! I don't mind the helpful editing work! :}
It's not the red-border thing (well, it's probably partly that), I just think that everyone mostly uses up all of their time keeping up with all the NEWEST, HOTTEST CONTENT online, be it on twitter or tumblr or FA or via Netflix or Hulu or Amazon Prime or HBO GoNowMax!!! And also Xbox, PS and Nintendo, and everything else.
No one has time [or they feel they don't], to go back and look at 'old things' - forgetting that everything is new to you if you haven't seen it and not realizing that one can spend their time on whatever they want, whenever they want.
'Twas a grand gargantuan bit of verbiage you deployed therein, indubitably. :}
Don't be embarrassed, though! I don't mind the helpful editing work! :}
It's not the red-border thing (well, it's probably partly that), I just think that everyone mostly uses up all of their time keeping up with all the NEWEST, HOTTEST CONTENT online, be it on twitter or tumblr or FA or via Netflix or Hulu or Amazon Prime or HBO GoNowMax!!! And also Xbox, PS and Nintendo, and everything else.
No one has time [or they feel they don't], to go back and look at 'old things' - forgetting that everything is new to you if you haven't seen it and not realizing that one can spend their time on whatever they want, whenever they want.
'Twas a grand gargantuan bit of verbiage you deployed therein, indubitably. :}
Wherein I would wish to withstand the weight of your wile words.
Your hypothesis is probably most true. It was my former fashion, before my foray with your first fables, to mindlessly mash the YouTube recommended algorithm.
Needed to return to my first internet pastime an lost love: scalie(furry) smut stories.
Your hypothesis is probably most true. It was my former fashion, before my foray with your first fables, to mindlessly mash the YouTube recommended algorithm.
Needed to return to my first internet pastime an lost love: scalie(furry) smut stories.
Comments