Very nice job! It capures a sad, somber feeling very well.

Hee It was ment to

I enjoyed this one Kogie! =3

Short, but oh so delicious. I especially like how it ends; that last line is a great way to finish it up. =P


Now it's time for this wolfmur to help his skittle-haired furiend out, by doing a grammar check. Cuz I want everyone to get a good impression when they read this. It's AWEsomeness must be retained! =O

1.) LINE 1: Assuming you're referring to both eyes, I believe it should (eyes'). I think the way you have it now is referring to ONE eye being possessive. (grammar can be an ass sometimes) >.>

2.) LINE 2: Assuming there's a rhyme scheme for every two lines, I believe the last word should be spelled (ache). As in, an aching heart....right?

3.) LINE 3: "Yours" should be just (your). =3

4.) LINE 7: Again with the rhyme scheme, the last word should be (speak).

I hope I'm helping. I have absolutely NO intention on being a pest. I'm too nice of a person. x3

If I get annoying, please just tell me to stop, k? =P

Keep'em coming btw. ^^

* pets and rubs your eras* Nah it lets me knwo where i got to go and fix things up at

murrrrrrrr x3

THAT FEELS GEWDS!!! ^_________^

Thanks; glad to help a fellow poet! =P

keeps petting