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Final Page!
Thank you for reading!
and Thanks
FrostTWolf for Commissioning me and help me with the text a lot >w<''!!
Feel Free to leave comments any advices is really aprreciated <3!
Thank you all again!
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Also Commission will be open soonnn
Thank you for reading!
and Thanks
FrostTWolf for Commissioning me and help me with the text a lot >w<''!!Feel Free to leave comments any advices is really aprreciated <3!
Thank you all again!
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Also Commission will be open soonnn
Category Artwork (Digital) / Comics
Species Bear (Other)
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File Size 773.6 kB
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I'm not a big fan the the blatant exposition. Sure there was cool ideas but it would have been a bit more tolerable (in my opinion) if the narration wasn't first person, such as the scientist telling the story from observation. It gives me that uncanny feeling that I've got in media such as "Metroid: Other M" and "Sword Art Online" which both use first person exposition and WAY too much of it with barely any story. Though this is just from my observation. If it were an ongoing series I would have easily ignored it.
Ohh that's sound great! but I think.. Something that happen inside the head cann't be tell by the other person tho.
I see the idea of using another character.but it will be hard to execute with limited pages >w<''.
It's the reason why I use first person narration.[but I don't intend to alway use it tho.that would be really boring haha]
I see the idea of using another character.but it will be hard to execute with limited pages >w<''.
It's the reason why I use first person narration.[but I don't intend to alway use it tho.that would be really boring haha]
You could also try to use environmental exposition as well. The power of an image can tell a story without words. Such as a narration for the photo wouldn't be necessary if he looked at it with a pained emotion. Other things such as monitors, lists, and documents can also be used for environmental exposition, all of which can condense a story and narration. Over half the comic could have been revamped to tell even more story if you use environmental exposition. This is a well known technique in the comic industry to curb out some of the costs to print extra pages and ink to skip alot of text bubbles through environmental exposition. Whats the point in having a comic if the story is told without the help of visual aide?
Using only picture is great.I've already tried that. but sometime if you need a clear explaination
text is much better.If I only show that picture and he was looking at it in pain then we wouldn't know
what is his relationship with the other guy in the picture right? and I cann't set up the next page with him
trying to kill his own mate XD.. and it would take a lot more pages than this.
but! If you have a way to tell all the story in 6 pages please show me.
I really want to know how to execute it! I still need a lot of improvemen and your comment is really appreciated!
Thank you very much :D!
text is much better.If I only show that picture and he was looking at it in pain then we wouldn't know
what is his relationship with the other guy in the picture right? and I cann't set up the next page with him
trying to kill his own mate XD.. and it would take a lot more pages than this.
but! If you have a way to tell all the story in 6 pages please show me.
I really want to know how to execute it! I still need a lot of improvemen and your comment is really appreciated!
Thank you very much :D!
For this Comic series.It is commission that I works for FrostTWolf
there's 2 other part in my gallery.[which is NSFW XD!]
And Thank you very much :>! I'm glad that you like it!
FrostTWolfthere's 2 other part in my gallery.[which is NSFW XD!]
And Thank you very much :>! I'm glad that you like it!
well if I need I'm comment in each page my comments will be infinite I guess XD so here my little opinion about that first of all your artwork your skill for draw are amazing! thanks for twitter I can see some of your steps before this and is incredible how you transform something simple like random lines and this about history you and tundra do it a perfect team for develop this awesome comics the history is so clear the past of tundra are really sad but at the same time kinda lucky why? easy it can live another new life and maybe will be more useful than before I guess was too interesting how each action conect the history between but I wondering who is the first master of tundra? I was thinking that he was turn into a cyber bear just for cofee and thats it but well maybe this is a question that is better asking in person to tundra jeje impressive kiryu just impressive also the last square and with the tundra expresion is kinda creepy XD
BTW sir now we know a lot about tundra even his past too but what about arcus and yourself? will be amazing if you draw or write the history of this guys also look this coffee is the nephew of arcus O_O man I read this and I feel like "NEED TO KNOW MORE!" cause is too interesting know the past how arcus too and know how he become in a cyborg bear Maybe I asking for much but as a totaly fan of your art and cyborgs and robot Know this gonna be amazing if you try to do some later
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