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"There you are Fox." Falco said with a smile as he walked to the other avian, "I was looking over for you."
Fox smiled, "I was just looking for my armband, that is all." She said as she would show it to him, "Like it?"
Falco responded by giving his birdie a warm hug, "You look great with it. It goes well with my wingman...and mate." He said.
Fox giggled and closed her eyes, nuzzling into his chest, "I am glad you like it, Falco."
No one would realize what happened. For Falco, he remembered Fox not as a friend, rival, and captain of the team, but rather as his lover. Everyone else on Starfox would know that Falco was the one in charge of Starfox, with Fox being his trusted wingman and mate. That was the truth now, and for Fox, she loved it all.
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Fox smiled, "I was just looking for my armband, that is all." She said as she would show it to him, "Like it?"
Falco responded by giving his birdie a warm hug, "You look great with it. It goes well with my wingman...and mate." He said.
Fox giggled and closed her eyes, nuzzling into his chest, "I am glad you like it, Falco."
No one would realize what happened. For Falco, he remembered Fox not as a friend, rival, and captain of the team, but rather as his lover. Everyone else on Starfox would know that Falco was the one in charge of Starfox, with Fox being his trusted wingman and mate. That was the truth now, and for Fox, she loved it all.
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Category All / Transformation
Species Avian (Other)
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File Size 624.7 kB
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hello ^^ I'm a critic of Transformation literature, and I would love to give you my review of this lovely story ^^
For starters, good concept, you don't see much of fox turning into another race (although the gender bend is a bit over done, but done very well here) the story you had was sweat and nice, and you used healthy memory replacement that fit the tone of the story, very well done. Now for the bad stuff (dont worry there not much) first off, why would his name still be Fox, you should have changed it to something different, Feather or something along those lines (off the top of my head so not my best name ever) and secondly I kinda get why Falco would lead starfox but at the same time I don't, Fox, while a different race and gender would still be his fathers son/ daughter and would still lead starfox, but that can be fixed with exposition.
alright thats my review, I give your story an 8 out of 10 ^^
For starters, good concept, you don't see much of fox turning into another race (although the gender bend is a bit over done, but done very well here) the story you had was sweat and nice, and you used healthy memory replacement that fit the tone of the story, very well done. Now for the bad stuff (dont worry there not much) first off, why would his name still be Fox, you should have changed it to something different, Feather or something along those lines (off the top of my head so not my best name ever) and secondly I kinda get why Falco would lead starfox but at the same time I don't, Fox, while a different race and gender would still be his fathers son/ daughter and would still lead starfox, but that can be fixed with exposition.
alright thats my review, I give your story an 8 out of 10 ^^
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