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This will be the first time of many; the first fifteen parts are in my journal in Deviantart, but since it includes mature content from the 15th part and so on, I changed to this page. You can check them there, anyway. I invented the whole story by myself, so any coincidence it's just a coincidence.
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Dragon (Other)
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 11.4 kB
Not bad for a start. My advice to you is "show, don't tell." The opening backstory about the dragons is fine, but when you're talking about the teens, it would be better to describe what they look like and how they act in the moment, rather than just giving us the cliffsnotes on them. It'd just be more effective.
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