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Nice one dude!
The phoenix would be proud Kogie! =P
I like the use of the word (woven) in STANZA 2, LINE 2.
Quickie grammar check:
1.) Stanza 2, Line 2: "where" should be (were)
2.) Stanza 2, Line 3: "where" should be (were)
3.) Stanza 2, Line 4: "every one" should be (everyone) ~the space doesn't look like it makes much of a difference, but it actually implies a different meaning~
4.) Stanza 2, Line 5: "where" should be (were)
5.) Stanza 3, Line 5: "For now on" should probably be (From now on) ~looking at the whole sentence, this seems to be what is needed; HOWEVER, if you rid the sentence of the word "on," you can leave it as it is, THOUGH that would be changing its meaning; I'm sure (From) is what you wanted~ ^^
I hope I helped! =P
The phoenix would be proud Kogie! =P
I like the use of the word (woven) in STANZA 2, LINE 2.
Quickie grammar check:
1.) Stanza 2, Line 2: "where" should be (were)
2.) Stanza 2, Line 3: "where" should be (were)
3.) Stanza 2, Line 4: "every one" should be (everyone) ~the space doesn't look like it makes much of a difference, but it actually implies a different meaning~
4.) Stanza 2, Line 5: "where" should be (were)
5.) Stanza 3, Line 5: "For now on" should probably be (From now on) ~looking at the whole sentence, this seems to be what is needed; HOWEVER, if you rid the sentence of the word "on," you can leave it as it is, THOUGH that would be changing its meaning; I'm sure (From) is what you wanted~ ^^
I hope I helped! =P
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