Very nice. Excellent plot twist. Some of the exposition in the first half of the story comes across as a bit heavy-handed, but it's hard to avoid that when you're trying to pack this much plot into a short story like this.

One spelling slip: "immanent" == "imminent". And the past-tense form of "lie" (as in "lie down") is "lay", not "lied"; so "He lied there for several minutes" should probably be "He lay there for several minutes". But if you do that then people will tell you it should be "laid", which is wrong, and then the whole debate about the various forms of "lie" and "lay" will open up in earnest. So maybe you should just pick another word instead. :)

Blast! I have managed to expunge my "lied" habit in recent writings, but it still lurks in older stuff such as this it seems. Thanks for pointing out the mistakes! I fixed them and re-uploaded. :)

I felt rather emotional at this and the plot twist.... I don't know what to say but to feel sad at how it all ended. Very good T_T!

Thanks for reading. :)

Wow! Short, but sweet. I mean sweet by SWEEEEEET. Nicely done, the story was great. Like the little twist, but, for one who writes plenty of twists and time-travel stuff, I actually expected that. This is what I mean, you should write more! You have amazing skills!

Ha ha, thanks. :)