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So, I said a while ago I was going to try and write a story using all the prompts, in order. That kind of turned into maybe writing a few stories using all the prompts.
And that kind of turned into this.
This covers "looking at the stars", "the prayer", "breaking news" and "snowed in". I've italicized the headings at about where each section takes place. As for the story, well, it kind of petered out in the end. I had had hopes for it, and writing on vacation, I just... I dunno, it didn't work out as I planned, so it's unfinished. I hope you enjoy at least a bit of it anyway.
And that kind of turned into this.
This covers "looking at the stars", "the prayer", "breaking news" and "snowed in". I've italicized the headings at about where each section takes place. As for the story, well, it kind of petered out in the end. I had had hopes for it, and writing on vacation, I just... I dunno, it didn't work out as I planned, so it's unfinished. I hope you enjoy at least a bit of it anyway.
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Even though an ending didn't work out for you, I think you've done well with the voice here, capturing the relative immaturity of the character as he tries to figure out what he wants (or doesn't want) and how to move toward it. Though the realist in me cringes at the suggestion that a tiger and a vixen might be able to have biological children. And I couldn't figure out what species Phil was. :P At any rate, though, a successful exercise.
I recall reading somewhere that in every piece of writing (particularly in genre writing like sf/f), you're given one free pass by the reader -- one big implausibility. Everything after that has to be believable. In this case, it gets used up on the walking and talking bit.
Actually, the whole "anything-goes hybrid furries" vs. "real-world hybrids only" (ligers and such) kind of plays into the whole humans-in-fur-coats thing. But I think we may have already gone far enough down that road. ;)
And the word "hybrid" looks really weird when you stare at it too long.
Actually, the whole "anything-goes hybrid furries" vs. "real-world hybrids only" (ligers and such) kind of plays into the whole humans-in-fur-coats thing. But I think we may have already gone far enough down that road. ;)
And the word "hybrid" looks really weird when you stare at it too long.
Well, any word does. o.o Are you high or something?
And you know my take on furries. :P This is what could possibly make furry a genre: those implausibilities that are simply taken for granted as "that's what a furry is". We have some leeway with the specifics (like which species can breed), but otherwise, the furry audience's suspension of disbelief begins on a level higher than a non-furry audience's would.
And you know my take on furries. :P This is what could possibly make furry a genre: those implausibilities that are simply taken for granted as "that's what a furry is". We have some leeway with the specifics (like which species can breed), but otherwise, the furry audience's suspension of disbelief begins on a level higher than a non-furry audience's would.
No, just an obsessive proofreader.
Your statement about "the furry audience" might be true enough -- in other words, most furries don't question whether it's believable -- but that's a bit like saying that most furries don't really care about the quality of what they're reading as long as it has their favorite species/fetish/whatever. It might be true to a certain degree, as a generalization, but as a reader and a writer, I still believe in reaching just a smidge higher, if only for myself. (Doesn't mean I always get there, of course, but it's worth trying.)
Or, you know, you could just make them human.
Your statement about "the furry audience" might be true enough -- in other words, most furries don't question whether it's believable -- but that's a bit like saying that most furries don't really care about the quality of what they're reading as long as it has their favorite species/fetish/whatever. It might be true to a certain degree, as a generalization, but as a reader and a writer, I still believe in reaching just a smidge higher, if only for myself. (Doesn't mean I always get there, of course, but it's worth trying.)
Or, you know, you could just make them human.
Well, yes, humans in fur coats. But very well written humans in fur coats ;) As for me, I don't mind so much, so long as it is consistent. I might argue that you get more than "one big implausibility," just don't go changing the rules in the middle. Of course I write for sanity, not for publication . . . *bows to her poetigressness*
It may seem like this petered out at the end, but I can believe that this could be the way such a relationship might end. The things that have been said and done could easily, in my mind, lead to a simple (and unsatisfactory, for readers and characters alike) fade out like this.
Very good work sir. =)
Very good work sir. =)
I think this is amazing. A slice of life, no, four slices of life, a story, told in a very good, even a bit dry manner, without unnecessary details or sidesteps. The whole thing, getting speed all the time, I really waited the ending, expecting it to be something truly magnificent, then... it was like a soda that has stood too long in an opened bottle, leaving only sugary and stale aftertaste as I take a sip. And I think it really works! Because I really was concerned for the guy there, I feared the vixen would tear his throat open or chain him up or something, but that... "I'm pregnant." Pause. "It's not yours." There's something very final in there, isn't it? Great piece of prose, I truly enjoyed reading this. Good work.
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