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First page of my comic :D
It's an adult comic wich deals with an Emperor who have a "strange" way to punish outlaws...
I ACCEPT CRITCS, FEEL FREE TO TELL ME WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THIS COMIC.
Also, tell me if you see english mistakes :X
Here's my twitter page, just check it out if you want info for this comic: https://twitter.com/inabiART
It's an adult comic wich deals with an Emperor who have a "strange" way to punish outlaws...
I ACCEPT CRITCS, FEEL FREE TO TELL ME WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THIS COMIC.
Also, tell me if you see english mistakes :X
Here's my twitter page, just check it out if you want info for this comic: https://twitter.com/inabiART
Category Artwork (Digital) / General Furry Art
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 1360 x 1821px
File Size 2.55 MB
Hey buddy. Alright, I do see some errors.
Third panel, hard to see some of the words in the upper right corner, might want to put a light colored box, like you did earlier in the comic, to make it visible. You also might want to put 'The town is governed by Jermi the Fox' (not 100% correct on my part, I know) in the upper left corner for reading clarity.
Third in the third panel, you want to say for the second text, 'He is a kind ruler of the 'people' in the town.' And for the third text of the third panel, 'Except for a certain kind of person.'
Then for the fourth panel, 'You can trust me your majesty, you won't regret it.' You have a bit of french there (which is fine if you want that to stay, just if it's suppose to be in english....), and trust is missing an s.
Hope all that helps buddy!
Third panel, hard to see some of the words in the upper right corner, might want to put a light colored box, like you did earlier in the comic, to make it visible. You also might want to put 'The town is governed by Jermi the Fox' (not 100% correct on my part, I know) in the upper left corner for reading clarity.
Third in the third panel, you want to say for the second text, 'He is a kind ruler of the 'people' in the town.' And for the third text of the third panel, 'Except for a certain kind of person.'
Then for the fourth panel, 'You can trust me your majesty, you won't regret it.' You have a bit of french there (which is fine if you want that to stay, just if it's suppose to be in english....), and trust is missing an s.
Hope all that helps buddy!
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