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A while after Collapse My Dream, I got in the mood for some writing again. I somehow came to my large character list for Entropy's War, and noticed that quite a few of them were still missing/unfilled. Coming across one character specifically: I remembered his name, what he looked like, what powers/abilities he had, and a little bit of how he started out. Other than that, Nothing Else. Notta. Zippo. I couldn't for the life of me remember what happened to the guy. What his role was in EW (Honestly, Bartan. You did not just shorten Entropy's War and get EW...), what he brought to the story, to the other characters. His interactions with the other characters. I remembered a few fight scenes with him in it, but not much else.
Now, one of the big reasons why I don't want to write Entropy's War is that it's like... 85% combat. It'd be fine for a series of games/movies/etc. But as a story... It doesn't bring what I seen to life (believe me, I've tried). However, the more I thought about this one character, the more it bothered me that I couldn't remember anything about it. But this also led me to brainstorm a bit more with it. Instead of actually writing/remaking a story for him that is like Entropy's War, why not try to focus on something a little bit differently?
And so, Afterlife was written. The main idea of this (if I end up continuing it) is to mainly explore what it means to be Humane. This part right now is short, mostly because I just wanted to add something on here for now. So I don't think I touched on that theme too much just yet. I personal feel like Zhaiothe's Tale was much better overall, but this turned out... Alright.
Granted, I will say something about this piece: It's mostly a drama. It's not made to be funny (though it may have it's moments), and it's not really made to be romantic like Zhai's was. Let alone made to be erotically appealing. I wanted to try something a little more serious, but I wonder if well... Nevermind. I'll read what you think about them first.
As for music credits:
Afterlife is by Amaranthe.
Shame is from Drowning Pool's Full Circle album.
And the song that is sung about halfway in is Bowling For Soup's Dance With You. An old classic that tends to stick with me.
Not much else to be said. Enjoy this project and tell me what you think.
Now, one of the big reasons why I don't want to write Entropy's War is that it's like... 85% combat. It'd be fine for a series of games/movies/etc. But as a story... It doesn't bring what I seen to life (believe me, I've tried). However, the more I thought about this one character, the more it bothered me that I couldn't remember anything about it. But this also led me to brainstorm a bit more with it. Instead of actually writing/remaking a story for him that is like Entropy's War, why not try to focus on something a little bit differently?
And so, Afterlife was written. The main idea of this (if I end up continuing it) is to mainly explore what it means to be Humane. This part right now is short, mostly because I just wanted to add something on here for now. So I don't think I touched on that theme too much just yet. I personal feel like Zhaiothe's Tale was much better overall, but this turned out... Alright.
Granted, I will say something about this piece: It's mostly a drama. It's not made to be funny (though it may have it's moments), and it's not really made to be romantic like Zhai's was. Let alone made to be erotically appealing. I wanted to try something a little more serious, but I wonder if well... Nevermind. I'll read what you think about them first.
As for music credits:
Afterlife is by Amaranthe.
Shame is from Drowning Pool's Full Circle album.
And the song that is sung about halfway in is Bowling For Soup's Dance With You. An old classic that tends to stick with me.
Not much else to be said. Enjoy this project and tell me what you think.
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Hi there,
This was a very great read again! I think you really wrote the emotions of the characters very well. Gorret is a very interesting character and I think you created a bit more serious, but nevertheless a very interesting setting! I think this story has a lot of potential and I am curious how the situations of the characters will develop.
So you have the same story watcher again! Sorry for commenting so late, I was quite busy with university stuff again; e.g. programming exercises. I did not listen to the songs this time, so when I finally will, I will let you know. And as always, thanks for sharing this story!
-Silent Moonlight Dragon
This was a very great read again! I think you really wrote the emotions of the characters very well. Gorret is a very interesting character and I think you created a bit more serious, but nevertheless a very interesting setting! I think this story has a lot of potential and I am curious how the situations of the characters will develop.
So you have the same story watcher again! Sorry for commenting so late, I was quite busy with university stuff again; e.g. programming exercises. I did not listen to the songs this time, so when I finally will, I will let you know. And as always, thanks for sharing this story!
-Silent Moonlight Dragon
Holy wow... I've been meaning to reply to your comment on last Saturday. But Hurricane Arthur hit us, and our power has been out since 10am until Friday at 4pm. So I apologize for the late-late-late reply. Just don't ask how my week has been
I'm glad you like this one, and I'm relieved to hear that you're back again. I've been contemplating on working on one of two stories, Afterlife being one of them (whereas the other I will post shortly... providing the power stays on). Afterlife tended to start out much more serious, then get a bit lighter later on (more explained later), whereas the other one; Hollow Bodies, will start out more comical, and evolve into a much more serious setting.
As for Gorret, he starts out very serious. Mostly the idea of him slowly regaining his humanity once again, as well as getting used to the world around him (hence why he tends to stare at objects quite a bit in silence. This actually has something to do with the way he senses the world). But later on he starts to be a bit more light-hearted, especially with the help of Gene. So the next part will probably be much less serious than this, but still try to hold the same message revolving around humanity.
It was great to hear from you again Silent. I hope your University studies went well, and I hope you enjoy the music I've suggested. I'll post Hollow Bodies very soon.
I'm glad you like this one, and I'm relieved to hear that you're back again. I've been contemplating on working on one of two stories, Afterlife being one of them (whereas the other I will post shortly... providing the power stays on). Afterlife tended to start out much more serious, then get a bit lighter later on (more explained later), whereas the other one; Hollow Bodies, will start out more comical, and evolve into a much more serious setting.
As for Gorret, he starts out very serious. Mostly the idea of him slowly regaining his humanity once again, as well as getting used to the world around him (hence why he tends to stare at objects quite a bit in silence. This actually has something to do with the way he senses the world). But later on he starts to be a bit more light-hearted, especially with the help of Gene. So the next part will probably be much less serious than this, but still try to hold the same message revolving around humanity.
It was great to hear from you again Silent. I hope your University studies went well, and I hope you enjoy the music I've suggested. I'll post Hollow Bodies very soon.
Hey,
Do not worry about the late reply; I'm glad you're still okay out there! I can imagine a hurricane causes a lot of troubles and grief; so I hope everything will become fine again; best wishes and have the most of luck!
Also, thanks for keeping me updated about your stories! I will read Hollow Bodies now, and hopefully can comment about it the same evening.
I also like what you have in plan for Gorret, and I am curious how everything will turn out. And somewhat less seriousness is fine too!
And some other news, I listened finally to the songs, I like them! They definitely add something to context of the story, and I am glad I listened them. And my university study is going well, first year finished without troubles; and I have fun in most of the things I have to learn; sometimes it just takes a lot of time; so thanks for mentioning it!
Thanks for taking your time for writing those replies; I think your stories truly deserve some more attention! Again, have the best of luck with your current situation; and hopefully I will see you back soon!
- Silent Moonlight Dragon
Do not worry about the late reply; I'm glad you're still okay out there! I can imagine a hurricane causes a lot of troubles and grief; so I hope everything will become fine again; best wishes and have the most of luck!
Also, thanks for keeping me updated about your stories! I will read Hollow Bodies now, and hopefully can comment about it the same evening.
I also like what you have in plan for Gorret, and I am curious how everything will turn out. And somewhat less seriousness is fine too!
And some other news, I listened finally to the songs, I like them! They definitely add something to context of the story, and I am glad I listened them. And my university study is going well, first year finished without troubles; and I have fun in most of the things I have to learn; sometimes it just takes a lot of time; so thanks for mentioning it!
Thanks for taking your time for writing those replies; I think your stories truly deserve some more attention! Again, have the best of luck with your current situation; and hopefully I will see you back soon!
- Silent Moonlight Dragon
Thank you Swagger
Kinda funny, I just started re-reading this series yesterday to start working on it's final act (3). I do see what you mean, the first half does feel rather short and rushed. I honestly felt like it was the most boring part of it, so I wanted to get almost over with ASAP. Though I do like it when Leslie gets 'kidnapped' by Gorret and then on, I really couldn't start from there without being rather confusing.
Really, it was an attempt for something more urban/modern. A setting which I feel has been done over and over, nearly beaten to death (that's probably why I feel it's boring). But it's a series for those who don't really want/like more Fantasy settings, and when I started this, that's all I really had. Even the next couple of novels afterwards were still more Fantasy than anything else, minus the blunt fact that they had very little humans in it.
Still, I hope you like it enough to attempt act 2 It's a bit longer, but I hope you enjoy it!
Thanks again
~Bartan
Kinda funny, I just started re-reading this series yesterday to start working on it's final act (3). I do see what you mean, the first half does feel rather short and rushed. I honestly felt like it was the most boring part of it, so I wanted to get almost over with ASAP. Though I do like it when Leslie gets 'kidnapped' by Gorret and then on, I really couldn't start from there without being rather confusing.
Really, it was an attempt for something more urban/modern. A setting which I feel has been done over and over, nearly beaten to death (that's probably why I feel it's boring). But it's a series for those who don't really want/like more Fantasy settings, and when I started this, that's all I really had. Even the next couple of novels afterwards were still more Fantasy than anything else, minus the blunt fact that they had very little humans in it.
Still, I hope you like it enough to attempt act 2 It's a bit longer, but I hope you enjoy it!
Thanks again
~Bartan
Just something to keep in mind: I thought it was written in Afterlife's Artist's Comments as well, but apparently it wasn't. I started this idea alongside another story known as Hollow Bodies, and there is something written in HB's first act:
"This story is kinda the counterpart to Afterlife, the one about Gorret. There is no relation to each other, nor are they even in the same universe. But I've been debating on which my next story would possibly be, and I'm stuck between these two. Whereas Afterlife tends to start out very serious and dramatic, Hollow Bodies is very light hearted, comical, and made to be fun... At first. It will eventually grow into a deeper story that has a much more serious tone to it, let alone message. Whereas Afterlife tends to be rather serious at first, and grows to be more playful."
The drama... Is still there in Afterlife act 2, but not like the one here. Just something I thought I'd let you know/to expect from the sequels
"This story is kinda the counterpart to Afterlife, the one about Gorret. There is no relation to each other, nor are they even in the same universe. But I've been debating on which my next story would possibly be, and I'm stuck between these two. Whereas Afterlife tends to start out very serious and dramatic, Hollow Bodies is very light hearted, comical, and made to be fun... At first. It will eventually grow into a deeper story that has a much more serious tone to it, let alone message. Whereas Afterlife tends to be rather serious at first, and grows to be more playful."
The drama... Is still there in Afterlife act 2, but not like the one here. Just something I thought I'd let you know/to expect from the sequels
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