Well, first thing that pops up in my messages.
gonna dive in now.

This was an absolutely beautiful and heart warming read.
Once again you nailed the emotion to the Key, if there was an emote for applause I'd applause a thousand times.

You're too kind, really ^.=.^

Enjoyed this series, was a bit anticlimactic and some paragraphs were oversized, though. But overall, a fun story that I hope to see a sequel to sometime.

Aww, anti-climactic? I'm sorry about that... I'll grant you, the scene in the arena at night, with Peter, I had envisioned being more... tense, but I kinda lost my plans on that, and hit a wall of writer's block... I hope the series overall was worth reading though, despite the flaws...

An excellent finale to a wonderful series. Amazing job as always!

I've never followed a series from start to finish as I did yours, but I'm glad I did. It was definitely worth the read. I found it quite rewarding to see Jace and Sunset (or Sunrise now I suppose), finally make it out of that place, and even more-so when Jace chose to stay with her.

If there's one small bit of constructive criticism I can offer you about your writing, it's that you should perhaps try to use less commas in certain sentences. It's not an overly large issue, and your writing is top-notch, but it might help ease the flow of reading when people experience your stories.

Thank you for gifting us with this series. I look forward to seeing what you come up with in the future.

I know about my comma problem, I notice it when I read, but I just put these things in without thinking... I'm honestly not sure how to change that habit. I'm glad you enjoyed the tale though, even though it took so long to finish.

The ones that take the longest to finish are usually the ones that are most worthwhile to read.

And best of luck on the comma fixing. If it bothers you, you should be able to push it from your habits in no time at all. It was a problem for me and my writing as well.

I've always been like that for commas though, I've tried to shake it, and I prune commas from my work before I post it, but it still has too many...

Hmm... that is quite strange. I can't remember how I managed to fix mine, but even now, I'm not perfect by any means. I still put them in where they're not needed from time to time. Usually I try to catch it as I write by rereading each and every paragraph after I write it, or even after a single sentence. As I mentioned in my first post however, it's only a minor hiccup in writing that most people probably won't even notice.

Other then that, I guess I don't know what else to suggest. My writing is still quite flawed, but I'd be willing to try and help and discuss it more if you want. I just don't know how other then the small amount of advice I've just given.

Well, I'll try to persevere, and work on it. It is a blip in my style that annoys me, I just think in pausing steps, and so I write in pausing steps

Alright. Good luck! I look forward to reading the stories you come out with next.

It's been quite a while since I've wandered in your gallery. I had stopped at "The Dragon Divers part2", and I admit I forgot about it, until I've had a look into the files I had saved on my computer, and found Serac's story again, and the first two parts of the Divers. I'm glad you kept going, because those stories of yours really are awesome.
I'm not that much into F/M when it comes to vore, as I'm more the M/M kind, but your stories make me go beyond that for some reason, and I love that. So I hope you keep going for a while, and find lots of new interesting stories involving fellow dragons~

Thanks again for those awesome stories~

I'm glad you enjoyed the story ^.=.^ It's nice to know people read them still, heh. It's curious, you bring up the F/M or M/M aspect as being one that doesn't get in the way for you in this. Certainly, when it comes to me, I don't mind the sex of the pred, perhaps some aspect of that gets into my writing, to make it enjoying to those where it's going against their normal preference. Either way, I'm delighted that for whatever reason you enjoyed the tale despite that aspect ^^ now that I think about it, I'm sure I've done M/F, F/M and M/M but I can't recall if I've ever done much F/F ^^ heh, perhaps there's something telling there

Well, when I read vore stories, most of the time it still has something to do with sex around here. I don't mind it, I actually rather enjoy it, but since the idea of females in sexual things like vore is for me, this tends to limit the stories I can read, without eventually getting bored. But you don't do that, you keep the story centered around the relationship itself, and relationship is something I greatly enjoy, no matter if it is with females or males. I guess that's the reason of your success in that matter if I might say that ^^. Of course, that doesn't mean I wouldn't enjoy some male bits against other male bits in your stories, I'd definitely love it, but I don't think they are needed. That's what makes it awesome to me. You can do or you can not do it, your stories will still be interesting to read. Not sure I would read a story containing only F/F though, but I don't know, surprise me? ^^

I do find lately a dash more direct sexuality has risen into my work, but I often try to avoid it... I'm not really good at such scenes, and I find them awkward. That's mostly why I normally try to keep it to more companionable relationships... after all, I would assume, like humans, a dragon who would engage with another species sexually are the exception rather than the rule ^^; not that I don't have a few of those exceptions amid my dragons. Though, as I said, when it comes to these scenarios, I rarely really give much pondering to the sexes of the dragon and human, it's the relationship between dragon and human I find more interesting than whatever gender based relationship there is to be examined... I think there is plenty of that around, and probably people who can write it better than me ^^

Yeah that's probably very true ^^ Anyway I hope you'll write more stories soon, and I'm definitely looking forward to reading more from you again.
Rawr

Sadly I'm unlikely to write very much in the immediate future... but I've got a couple of ideas for when I have the time. I'll try not to disappoint though ^^;

You'd better not disappoint. I'm a dragon, and the characters in your stories tend to visit dragon's stomachs. You wouldn't want to go in mine.
Rawr

^.=.^ we'd have to see who'll go in whose belly

Sounds good to me~
Rawr!

Heh, feel free to message me anytime to discuss dinner arrangements ^.=.^

I shall! I always have some humans ready for when I invite other dragons at my place. ^,,^

Sounds tasty ^.=.^ hmm, but tell you what, if you want to continue this line of thought, I think this site has a more direct messaging system. I'm getting aware how much we fill out the comment page ^.=.^;

Since I enjoyed this story, you deserve a critique of the final chapter.

I was a bit disappointed with this, and felt it was a bit hurried and not completely thought out. The fat merchant directly approaching Sunset in public to murder a dragon diver does not seem believable. Sunset kidnapping her diver and leaving merely reinforces what I said all along, the arena/diving show would have never worked without an Alpha dragon in charge to keep the others in line. After all, you have only told the story of two diving dragons and BOTH broke their 'dragon's honor code' and deliberately broke the rules. You demonstrate admirably how this would never work because the dragons do not keep their word, and the humans are powerless to enforce their rules without 'dragon backup'.

If I were writing the finale, I would have had the Fat Guy actually enter Sunset's Paddock to negotiate the murder because he can't do something illegal like that in public, but instead Sunset eats him (and probably his bodyguards too, as he probably wouldn't go in alone.) Sunset could get away with this and claim they tried to attack her, or they wanted to be eaten by her. To keep with your own notion that the dragons are honorable, Sunset doesn't steal Jace because it was against the rules she agreed to, but because of their friendship and skill, they remain Diving partners until Jace wins his freedom and the leave together legally and not like criminals, or perhaps remain in the city because they would be huge celebrities by then.

There's still a lot that could be done with the dragon-diving theme, it is probably the best idea in your overall work, and worthy of an actual book. But it does have some problems as I think I have shown. Hope to read more 'diving' stories in the future, and thanks for sharing them!

We've gone over this, so many times. NO alpha dragon, why? Because dragons Do Not Work Like That. Dragons do not have alphas, if there was a bigger dragon telling them what to do, they Would Not Stay. I've told you time and time again, the "rules" are nothing more than an honor code, and the humans are fine with that, because they have no choice. Why cannot you understand, alpha dragons do not exist, they would never work, they are one of the most ridiculous ideas you've spouted at me.
To correct you, as I seem to have to far too often, I have written of two dragons, and neither broke their honor code. The first instance assumedly must be Arrow, and you've got it in your head that the second story was such a break, it was not, if a rule was broken, it was by the humans who decided to try that somewhat unfair new trial. In this instance, Jace was not a legal diver, that was the point... he was Not bound by the rules of the divers, hence, there was no rule about taking him away. After a dive, assuming they didn't eat their diver, a dragon may leave, and since Jace was not a real diver, but simply confined in their numbers for protection, it is not breaking the rules... it's called a loophole, and loopholes mean you aren't breaking your word, but taking advantage of an aspect of the deal the other side didn't consider.
Also, the crime lord, not a fat merchant, who approached Sunset was not crying out his intentions in public, you're deliberately trying to find fault, regardless of what is written, or common sense. After the shows, the crowd leaves, a select few come down, to poke or talk to a dragon, then both parties leave, he lingered, asked when they were alone. The idea that he'd go down to the stables is... honestly, have you read my stories? Why would you even suggest or expect that, the stables is a place even divers fear to tread... if he went down there, it would be a death sentence, he'd be lucky if he even made it to Sunset's stall. The entire point of Jace being put into the divers was because people cannot get in. If he had enough free rein to wander down to the stables, why not just wander along to Jace's room and kill him in his sleep.

Your argument is based upon falsehoods, to the point that once again you make me wonder if you're actually reading the stories you critique. Allow me to be absolutely clear, for the very last time, because your self gratification is sickening me. What you've said all along about alpha dragons is as wrong now as it was then. Dragons do not have hierarchies, and if they were being browbeaten into rules, they would not stay, therefore even if by some inconceivable way such an "alpha" could be found and recruited, it would become the one and only dragon in the show. I have stated as thus, the dragons DO follow the code, at least as well or much better than humans follow our own laws. The situation is a fine balance, but in the context of this world, it does work. Also, oddly enough, few stories ever written are about the mundane, stories focus on the abnormalities, the odd days, the times when the edge of the rules were ridden. If the dragons I've covered in detail are close to the edge of the rules, then by all means pause and look at the other background examples of all the dragons who have not gone anywhere near that edge. For once in our conversations, accept you are Wrong, or at least accept that I disagree with you, and stop broadcasting the same rejected idea, it's childish.

Wow! WOW! Macabre_Dragon recommended this to me and words cannot express how much I loved this series! You tackle the subject of vore with the appreciation and maturity it truly deserves, and it’s an absolute adventure to experience! And man….. my heart was pumping along with Jace’s as the anticipation of the dive kept building and building!

I really look forward to reading more from you, and thank you so much for sharing! :)

I'm delighted to hear you enjoyed it so much. I do try to find the balance between story and vore, and it makes my day when somebody feels I've done it right ^.=.^

You nailed it :D All the effort you put into your world makes everything that happens within have so much more impact.

I absolutely loved the dialogues between Jace and Sunset too! Man, he takes her teasing so well... I'd have been a nervous fidgeting mess after so many casual mentions of being breakfast ;) You know what they say about repetition...

Hehe, I spent a lot of time trying to get the dialogue between those two right. I don't think I quite got it right, he quite quickly learns it's best to just ignore her comments, rather than provoke more ^^ but it was terrific fun writing the playful little exchanges.

Believe me when I say, you've really made my day ^^ may I ask if this is your first foray into my gallery?

Hey I'm glad to hear that haha! And it is my first time in your gallery indeed, a friend linked me to this series in particular. Of course I'll gladly stay and explore, perhaps do you have any recommendations? ;)

Well, the dragon divers are likely my most fun idea, but, my longest series is that of Serac, but I'm not completely satisfied with it. I'm not sure I have any specific recommendations ^^ but those stories with my most used dragon, Merinith, are some of my favorites, but, it's varied. My style has changed a lot with time ^^; Besides, I like trying sometimes to do new things, so not everything I write appeals to everyone ^^; my first series when I wrote vore was the Of Heroes and Dragons series, which some people still quite like, though I find a little... primitive in style since I've grown. Long story short, I'd recommend trying whatever sounds good ^^

I'm kinda giddy to have you looking through my work if I'm honest ^.=.^ I'm a fan

I shall start from the beginning then ;) Thanks!

Sprout recommended that I read your work and I'm very impressed =D I absolutely love complex inter-species relationships and the world you've set up here is just delightful and immersive. I greatly enjoyed the dynamic between Jace and Sunset and I thought their relationship built up quite naturally considering their situation and their differences in species.

Fantastic work, and quite a touching ending <3

^.=.^ Well thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I adore writing the relationship between these predatory and preyish species, considering my own take on how they might interact and the weave between them. So, it's always a delight to hear when somebody else also likes that aspect

Hehe, and I can't help but note the pleasant coincidence or design, by which Sprout's comment of having been recommended me himself, is right before yours. Seems word of mouth is working ^.=.^

I loved your Peter character, he was so hard to pin down. His only certain characteristics seemed to be his wit and a sense that he believed himself to be untouchable (in a sense). Since simpleminded characters who think they are untouchable are more common in vore literature than even dragon characters, I kept trying to understand him as a simple minded character, except that he was too discerning and too often he was right where he needed to be. (Or in the case one of Sunsets previous remarks, where he needed to not be.) I couldn't even decide if liked him or hoped he would be eaten! My only regret is that I did not realize that Sunset was freed from her word by the Peter's brilliant declaration that they were "not escaping...", until it was mentioned in the epilogue, and Sunset immediately understanding the implication explained her very swift departure.

Also, the ending was beautiful, I was in tears.

^^ Always nice to hear when someone liked a story. Thanks for being so descriptive, it's always interesting to hear the perspective people get

Oh I've never actually read this series except I believe the first story introducing thebiccneot which was very enjoyable. I use an audio read on my iphone and I have to say I listened to the whole series in one afternoon, around 3-3.35 hours. Wonderful! I thoroughly enjoyed the emotional ending. Sunrise's personality was adorable! And you really do such a pleasant fashion of bringing the characters and they're surroundings to life. Hoping Sunrise eventually finds a mate and has a few dragonlings! And that she eventually gets that trainer alone........

This was possibly one of my favourite series, as I recall. I was quite enamoured with the idea