1.) A job well done. Things were in place, but it lacked a lot of details I would have appreciated. Apart from that, the ending was dissatistying. Too sad. I had hoped that Peter would fry his bitch-of-a-mother and angsting brother and then calm his sister. Ach vell....can't have everything in this world.

2.) The characters were personal and seemed real, each with their unique minds. Their looks weren't mentioned however, so that's a flaw in my book.
Also, there was a strict line of the goods and the bads. Peter was the good guy, his brother and ma the assholes and his little sister a fearful child on his side.

3.) The plot had its moments, but it wasn't much. But stilll, you had one. It's score for you for at least trying, right?

4.) Peter seems like the only reasonable and competent someone, the others lacking just about all the skills required in everyday life, and heavily biaised.
And the Father is accused of being a neglecting drunk - Why does the mother seem like e leech she is called? Hmm...

5.) Personally, I would have had Peter change into a gargantuan black dragon and some other things too. But they are trivial.

Well, the main thing I tried to make the center of the story was Peter's whole picture of the world. The story's basically told from his perspective so all the characterizations and events are filtered through his bias; that's why all the other characters' flaws are accentuated so much. The other characters may seem two dimensional(and Peter himself) but that's his fault. And in the end, that's why I choose an unhappy ending, because it's all about his bias and how things really aren't how he insists to himself they are. He's so busy labeling everyone else with bad qualities that he doesn't bother looking to see if he has any himself. (Random aside, for example, he thinks of his sister as perfectly innocent right now, but wait ten years I almost garuntee Peter'd be bitching to her about how she's become so flawed over the years. If they hadn't gotten lost in this weird garden of course)

So, I had a plot going in, but I probably didn't ensure that it came out clear enough, which is something I guess I'll just have to work through. And the lack of physical descriptions is something else to; I tend to brush past physical descriptors when I read and I'm not paying enough attention to it.

Great work, I'd say. Honestly, Peter seemed like a bit of a douche to me right from the get-go, so I figured that his greatest desire quest wasn't going to end well.
One thing I'm curious about, to which I don't remember finding any clues as to what the answer might be: how did they get there in the first place? Was that also something to do with Peter's desire, or...?
The monster attack was exciting, but again I'm not entirely certain what the point was. I think if you integrate these answers into the story, it would be more complete.
It was really good, though. Just see if you can't merge everything together a little more clearly, and it'll be perfect.

Good story. Loved the ending, not because it was a sad ending, but because that's probably what would have happened had this story been real. One thing I've learned about life is that it doesn't always turn out the way you want it, or the way you would expect.

And I agree with Captain. It was lacking in a few areas, but again, they were trivial. Good job.

aaaw, i woulda been beating myself up over that if it had happenend to me! i woulda beaten myself up from the moment i realized i haden't achieved my goal.

Holy shit, that was a brilliant read. I really felt the characters' emotions, I felt in tune with them, I felt their anguish and hurt and hate. Holy Hell.

This story really grabbed me; pulled me in; held me riveted to my seat, like a roller coaster. I really can't laud you enough for how believable the characters were. None were shining paragons, making the others look dingy in their glow; no, they all had their own flaws, and that really is important for the reader to care about them.

I really felt the tidal pull in the transmogrification as Peter battled it out within himself, trying, and ultimately failing, not to give in, to enjoy it. It really had this quite powerful parabola of tenseness and relaxation, up and down. Just great.

As mentioned, though, a basic character description would have helped; even letting the reader know that the family was, indeed, human. On this site, it is all too easy to imagine any number of species they might have been. It makes the story easier to visualize, and perhaps adds some impact to the metamorphosis scene, itself. None of us know what it is like to be an anthropomorphic animal, but we all know how it is to be human; letting us connect with Peter on that level beforehand could reach deeper depths within us when it comes to the change, perhaps encouraging us to feel some of it, ourselves.

Spelling and grammar was top notch, for which I heartily thank you. It's hard to fully appreciate a story when one must comprehend so much energy to merely decipher it.

I don't normally read stories about this, but you have opened my eyes to just how gripping they can be. Keep up the good work!