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This story focuses on Zoe who goes through a life changing experience which made her become self-conscious but gets over it with her younger sister Gail and her boyfriend Digby.
The characters who are mentioned belonged to the 2912 TV series, Littlest Pet Shop.
Zoe becoming bloated by a smoothie was inspired by
chubbyfurs
The characters who are mentioned belonged to the 2912 TV series, Littlest Pet Shop.
Zoe becoming bloated by a smoothie was inspired by
chubbyfurs
Category Story / Fat Furs
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 90px
File Size 14.3 kB
I like this story a lot. You show some real potential in weight gain stories! You may want to proofread your story for grammatical errors before your submit it, but overall, I love what this story offers to the reader.
The dialogue was just like the characters would say it! And I absolutely loved it when Pepper but Vinnie over the head with the rubber chicken. I'd be happy to collaborate on a story together if you'd like!
I think you could do seriously well with stories like this. Good job 9/10 on content, 6/10 for grammar and spelling.
The dialogue was just like the characters would say it! And I absolutely loved it when Pepper but Vinnie over the head with the rubber chicken. I'd be happy to collaborate on a story together if you'd like!
I think you could do seriously well with stories like this. Good job 9/10 on content, 6/10 for grammar and spelling.
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