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My first contribution here, and the culmination of some ideas I've had floating around for a few years now and finally got the inspiration to put into text. I've been posting progress and comments here: http://forums.macrophile.com/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=18451
(do note that I ramble on quite a bit on there . . . and there's some arguable spoilers too, so keep that in mind -plus I discuss some "behind the scenes" stuff in terms of my thought process and inspiration)
I highly recommend checking the forums out in general, though; they're a lot slower than they used to be, but still a lot of neat stuff comes up. (mostly writing these days, but there's still some neat comics or pics added once in a while too)
And, I wasn't planning on posting anything here until I did another pass of edits (and maybe got a bit further into the story), but realized I might as well post the work in progress, which is certainly polished enough to be enjoyable, at least. ;) On that note, I'm pretty sure chapter 2 needs the most reworking, so yeah.
Yeah, so here's chapters 1 through 4 of what I've got so far.
(do note that I ramble on quite a bit on there . . . and there's some arguable spoilers too, so keep that in mind -plus I discuss some "behind the scenes" stuff in terms of my thought process and inspiration)
I highly recommend checking the forums out in general, though; they're a lot slower than they used to be, but still a lot of neat stuff comes up. (mostly writing these days, but there's still some neat comics or pics added once in a while too)
And, I wasn't planning on posting anything here until I did another pass of edits (and maybe got a bit further into the story), but realized I might as well post the work in progress, which is certainly polished enough to be enjoyable, at least. ;) On that note, I'm pretty sure chapter 2 needs the most reworking, so yeah.
Yeah, so here's chapters 1 through 4 of what I've got so far.
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This was supposed to go in scraps . . . hence my comment in the description. Oh well. ;)
Anyway, thanks.
Been kicking parts of this around since some time in 2010, I think . . . mostly just the setting and premise, but it all kind of exploded in the last few months. Honestly, it's ended up a LOT better than I thought . . . especially considering I haven't written fiction of any kind at all since 10th grade . . . some 9 years ago. Academic stuff, yes (essays, research papers, etc), but no fiction . . . I've read a lot, of course, (including a ton of stuff on here and -especially- over at macrophile) and have been way more active in discussions in the writing forums the last couple years. (there's certainly a good bunch of talented -and some exceptional- writers over on that site I've been following for . . . well, some of them for just about as long as I've known of the community, so I'm sure I learned a lot of things from them, including what styles and themes I liked and disliked, and which ones I'd be more comfortable with doing)
I'm honestly surprised by how much creativity I've been channeling too; then again, I'd spent a lot of those efforts in some other areas previously. (other hobbies, and TONS of discussions on various things, including tech/history stuff . . . I mean, I'm kind of torn between a lot of things, if my profile info didn't give that away -actually, I need to add the macro/micro/vore stuff too that . . . )
Anyway, I've got a huge chunk of this in the works now, but it's just a mess of notes. (and I've been backing things up as I go, so very little chance in losing any progress)
I'll probably be a few weeks before I get the proper time to draft it. (might get that editing of the current stuff done too) Worst case, it'll be some time after finals . . . so mid December.
No promises other than that this will definitely be continuing. ;)
Anyway, thanks.
Been kicking parts of this around since some time in 2010, I think . . . mostly just the setting and premise, but it all kind of exploded in the last few months. Honestly, it's ended up a LOT better than I thought . . . especially considering I haven't written fiction of any kind at all since 10th grade . . . some 9 years ago. Academic stuff, yes (essays, research papers, etc), but no fiction . . . I've read a lot, of course, (including a ton of stuff on here and -especially- over at macrophile) and have been way more active in discussions in the writing forums the last couple years. (there's certainly a good bunch of talented -and some exceptional- writers over on that site I've been following for . . . well, some of them for just about as long as I've known of the community, so I'm sure I learned a lot of things from them, including what styles and themes I liked and disliked, and which ones I'd be more comfortable with doing)
I'm honestly surprised by how much creativity I've been channeling too; then again, I'd spent a lot of those efforts in some other areas previously. (other hobbies, and TONS of discussions on various things, including tech/history stuff . . . I mean, I'm kind of torn between a lot of things, if my profile info didn't give that away -actually, I need to add the macro/micro/vore stuff too that . . . )
Anyway, I've got a huge chunk of this in the works now, but it's just a mess of notes. (and I've been backing things up as I go, so very little chance in losing any progress)
I'll probably be a few weeks before I get the proper time to draft it. (might get that editing of the current stuff done too) Worst case, it'll be some time after finals . . . so mid December.
No promises other than that this will definitely be continuing. ;)
Aww, crap . . . turns out I posted an older revision on top of that. I'd already added some detail towards the latter half of chapter 4, but I posted the old version. (adds both detail, improved description, and makes things a bit less confusing -had some complaints about the vore scene being a little confusing- it's decidedly better in any case, and doesn't change anything fundamental -just better storytelling for what was already in my head :p )
Not a big deal, but you might want to take a look in any case . . . or wait a good deal longer for the "final" revisions I'm hoping to get to at some point . . . or both. ;)
Not a big deal, but you might want to take a look in any case . . . or wait a good deal longer for the "final" revisions I'm hoping to get to at some point . . . or both. ;)
While I'm not one to brag, but I'm not particularly averted to it either, and I certainly won't refuse compliments . . . so thanks. (again, I kind of surprised myself too ;) . . . it's certainly impressive enough to make me consider making more room for this area of my hobbies)
I was only going to put it in my scraps given my imminent plans for another edit . . . then again, I guess it would probably make more sense to just move this version over to scraps after I upload the edited version. (no way I'm going to replace/remove the old version though . . . I've got a thing about archiving/preservation, that and I tend to be rather sentimental)
I was only going to put it in my scraps given my imminent plans for another edit . . . then again, I guess it would probably make more sense to just move this version over to scraps after I upload the edited version. (no way I'm going to replace/remove the old version though . . . I've got a thing about archiving/preservation, that and I tend to be rather sentimental)
Admittedly, I kinda prefer reading everything all at once here then over a say four to five forum pages on Macrophile. The forums are what they are but I do like me some consolidation.
Thus far, looks like a plenty fun and goofy read, impaired feline judgment and accidental nommings and all.
Thus far, looks like a plenty fun and goofy read, impaired feline judgment and accidental nommings and all.
I have to say part of that theme is inspired by how much I enjoyed your First Crack at this, though there's probably a more solid and detailed setting built for this one (not sure how much that will show through in the story -at least in this series), and . . . well, I guess yours got pretty dark too (if you really think about it), but this one's doing that in somewhat different directions. (and the world itself isn't so much the -albeit fairly typical- macro/micro dystopia of others in this vein)
That, and the "kids" here are obviously older . . . though that kind of contrasts even more, while still riding the edge of being believable characters.
That, and the "kids" here are obviously older . . . though that kind of contrasts even more, while still riding the edge of being believable characters.
Goodness, Christy is quite the brash one. Gets high in someone's front lawn, cat pounces her friend all the time, liberal with her claws, little care in her movement on a rough hillside, and now she essentially jumps down a giant's throat. She is the absolute opposite of Josh, and it's adorable. She annoyed me at first, but I have to give her credit for getting the story moving to where it is now. I had some worries about her being covered in catnip and going looking for a giant feline. The encounter was not what I was expecting but the end result ended up accidentally falling in place anyway.
I am happy Maria turned out to be quite friendly, despite the accidental noms. There is only one way I can imagine this disaster being averted, and it ain't pretty.
Now, writing commentary! It flows well but it does get hitched sometimes with the rough state. I read your edited Chapter 1 and it is excellent in resolving this issue, so keep that up! I am enjoying the passive world building. It suggests a larger scale to your setting without distracting from the story at hand. Although we have not seen much friendly macro/micro interaction just yet, what is there is sweet, just the way I like it!
Finally, the dream was a bit curious. It must have a reason for being so specific and mostly correct so far and I am wondering why. I hope that gets revealed soon enough. But Christy needs to get out of her rather serious situation first and I am itching to see a terribly sorry and ashamed giantess worrying over a little one.
I am happy Maria turned out to be quite friendly, despite the accidental noms. There is only one way I can imagine this disaster being averted, and it ain't pretty.
Now, writing commentary! It flows well but it does get hitched sometimes with the rough state. I read your edited Chapter 1 and it is excellent in resolving this issue, so keep that up! I am enjoying the passive world building. It suggests a larger scale to your setting without distracting from the story at hand. Although we have not seen much friendly macro/micro interaction just yet, what is there is sweet, just the way I like it!
Finally, the dream was a bit curious. It must have a reason for being so specific and mostly correct so far and I am wondering why. I hope that gets revealed soon enough. But Christy needs to get out of her rather serious situation first and I am itching to see a terribly sorry and ashamed giantess worrying over a little one.
Just finished reading this and I'm liking it so far. Got a bit of an inverse Calvin and Hobbes feel with Christy's introduction (I'm hooooome!) but she quickly evolved into her own character, and a very quirky one at that. Impulsive, witty and all around playful as one would expect of a cat, she's quite fun to follow; I'd say she is my favorite part of the story thus far. The pieces of her and Josh's relationship really helped flesh our her character on top of the entertaining dialogue.
Was a bit of a surprise to see Maria be so lax about not only giant/little interaction, but easing into catnip on a whim. It is nice to see giants confident in their ability to handle smaller folk rather than worry about it terribly much... even if it concluded the way it did. :P That and, now that I'm reading it, you don't see many bobcat anthros, let alone giants. It's a nice touch.
As for flow and general writing commentary, what's been said has been said, and indeed most of those issues have been amended with your revised chapter 1. Just needs some polish and punctuation fixes, and some minor details felt as though they were given a little too much emphasis. Would be looking forward to seeing that done with the other chapters as well, and definitely want to see how the trio manages to get out of their current mess.
Was a bit of a surprise to see Maria be so lax about not only giant/little interaction, but easing into catnip on a whim. It is nice to see giants confident in their ability to handle smaller folk rather than worry about it terribly much... even if it concluded the way it did. :P That and, now that I'm reading it, you don't see many bobcat anthros, let alone giants. It's a nice touch.
As for flow and general writing commentary, what's been said has been said, and indeed most of those issues have been amended with your revised chapter 1. Just needs some polish and punctuation fixes, and some minor details felt as though they were given a little too much emphasis. Would be looking forward to seeing that done with the other chapters as well, and definitely want to see how the trio manages to get out of their current mess.
Wow! Loved it. Can't wait to what Christy discovers inside Maria!
At first I viewed the story as being similar to the classic Japanese comic romance (beautiful girl pouncing on frumpy guy) but as others mentioned, as we read on it became more nuanced, in some ways similar to Calvin and hobbes.
When's chapter 5? :) :)
At first I viewed the story as being similar to the classic Japanese comic romance (beautiful girl pouncing on frumpy guy) but as others mentioned, as we read on it became more nuanced, in some ways similar to Calvin and hobbes.
When's chapter 5? :) :)
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