This is turning into a really good story, i can tell. can't wait to see the rest.

Im really kinda glad the two are getting along just nicely. Rick seems like a decent human, but now it makes me wonder whats gonna happen once they reach the inner ring.

Very interesting story man. More comments and thoughts on the way. ^^

Oh and Spark is awesome. I love her seemingly natural ability to fix/repair mechanical stuff.

this is a really good story o.o i like it, i'll have to read the rest of it too

Hey there fox, I figured the yote might pope in and leave a little comment, I really enjoy the character enter action between Rick, and Spark, seeing that was a cute name for him to give her in the first place, seeing that she’s extremely gifted with technological devices, man, I use her skill so maybe I could perhaps invent a super conductor, make millions of dollars and never have to work again, Hahha, anyway, enough joking aside, great story, though a few spelling errors, I think you ment “Help” as apposed to Kelp” hahah and “Name” instead of “Mane” otherwise, fantastic story so far. Oh yes, I do enjoy the character dialog as well. ^^