just in case the file is unable to be opened ill post it in comments as well.
so many mask's to remember my lies
so many lives lead i wish they would die
which shall we wear today my friend
what wounds will you cut that will no no end
what facade shall we play to make there day
what life will you choose to live up to there say
oh please oh please let me put on
oh i wounder oh i wounder just how long
can you keep it my friend it seems to me your slipping
yes your slipping yes your slipping your slipping once again
can you fix once its broken will it be a means to an end
if your masks break will there still be a you
haven't you forgotten these masks are the only you
oh my friend it seems they wont last
no they wont last for long
what will you do when you are no more
what can you do when they break and whats left is a blighted sore
can you keep it that image that image maintain
all that you are to them could all be in vain
oh dear friend the masks they crack
the face behind is so void and black
dear friend dear friend
soon the facade shall end
so many mask's to remember my lies
so many lives lead i wish they would die
which shall we wear today my friend
what wounds will you cut that will no no end
what facade shall we play to make there day
what life will you choose to live up to there say
oh please oh please let me put on
oh i wounder oh i wounder just how long
can you keep it my friend it seems to me your slipping
yes your slipping yes your slipping your slipping once again
can you fix once its broken will it be a means to an end
if your masks break will there still be a you
haven't you forgotten these masks are the only you
oh my friend it seems they wont last
no they wont last for long
what will you do when you are no more
what can you do when they break and whats left is a blighted sore
can you keep it that image that image maintain
all that you are to them could all be in vain
oh dear friend the masks they crack
the face behind is so void and black
dear friend dear friend
soon the facade shall end
Category Poetry / All
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Greetings fellow Queenslander.
I think you might need to do some reading on poetic structures. Your current structure lacks rhythm, doesn't read particularly easily.
You may find learning and working strictly within traditional structures such as a sonnet could improve your rhythm and control.
I think you might need to do some reading on poetic structures. Your current structure lacks rhythm, doesn't read particularly easily.
You may find learning and working strictly within traditional structures such as a sonnet could improve your rhythm and control.
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