The world sounds interesting, but this one seems a little too short. Shortness can be good sometimes, but in this case, when the reader is still getting used to the world, it makes it harder to place: I'd give a few sentences to describing his home so you can show how he lives/about his life, giving more insight to his character. Same with the market, describe it and the people there, and expand the attack so it's described.

With description, remember that not only can sight be described, but smell, taste, touch, and sound. Using small details like that can enliven the world you're describing here.

If you reworked this, you could expand it by another page or two--at least three more paragraphs the size of your first one. I'd try that out, then reupload it in this one's place.

By the way, you forgot to tag your stories, and that'd probably help some with getting more readers. You can use the edit function to change all of that.