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I'm putting some of my own lyrics to bottomfeeder by blessthefall
Should i continue?
LYRICS
We've lost our way in the midst of the dark
Forever trapped in eternal hate
Now we claw our way out of the pit
but keep losing our grasp to the depths
someone save me from myself
Where did it all go wrong?
This isnt the way its meant to be
MEANT TO BE
the last time this happened, you promised it wouldnt happen again
Should i continue?
LYRICS
We've lost our way in the midst of the dark
Forever trapped in eternal hate
Now we claw our way out of the pit
but keep losing our grasp to the depths
someone save me from myself
Where did it all go wrong?
This isnt the way its meant to be
MEANT TO BE
the last time this happened, you promised it wouldnt happen again
Category Music / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 91px
File Size 3.07 MB
Hmm the flow of it seems a little forced, especially as the sylables are very hard pronounced, maybe drop some sylables or add a rhyme scheme to make it seem more naturall?
The Clean - Chorus fits perfectly
happened <---> happen again is a word recursion, which sounds a little odd to me
maybe change it to something that incorproates the meaning without using the same word?
Love the clean part <3
The Clean - Chorus fits perfectly
happened <---> happen again is a word recursion, which sounds a little odd to me
maybe change it to something that incorproates the meaning without using the same word?
Love the clean part <3
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